The girl who cried "Wolf!" - Comments

I could eat the 5th submission with a spoon, cause it's probably the best thing I've read in a while.

FINALLY A NEW SUBMISSION JESUS H FUCKING CHRIST

I like :3

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Alpha's are scary...
lol loved the update!

dfiosdnfsio wow. You already have nine subscribers :D
And because I'm still reading this, you should be like, "wow. Oh my God," because I always skim through stuff on Mibba cus I ceebs reading it :3
*waits patiently for more*

yay more characters!
xD

This story is definitely interesting. I read it very carefully to give you the comment you have requested. Your writing is near flawless. There are just a few things, maybe some grammar issues but nothing major.In the first chapter you had this:

A pup, to be exact. My pack moves towards the noise.
“Halt!” I bark, “It’s a Wolf pup, a Werewolf pup to be exact.”

Your word choice sometimes is the same.Change it up a bit. Use a thesaurus for finding another word that could mean the same thing. I use word and sometimes that is what I use when I feel like I am using the same word too much :)

Another thing, I found it just a tad bit difficult to read with the spacing. It looks like one giant paragraph. There were tons of spots were you were showing the different people that were talking, but hit that enter button once more, kind of like I did for this comment. Each little parapgraph in here I pressed enter twice, it just makes it easier to read :)

The layout, simple, but it works for your story :) I love the attention to detail and I could get into this story. It is different from any of the stories that I have read on this site, but I liked it alot :) Very intriguing. Other than the few things that I saw I liked this story and you are a good writer. Amazing job :)

like!
*subscribes*

Omigosh I like it :D :D
And I don't normally do this, but ima subscribe to this story :3
... When you admit you don't need fingers ;D
Nah, I'm joking. I shall subscribe.