very very interesting
May 21st, 2011 at 04:15pm
I read it all and I must say that I like this. You said this was a sequal, well, I haven't read the first one, but you still give enough past information that I do not feel lost in this story what so ever. I am really liking this. You have a way with words and you pay attention to detail. You drag me in to the point where I can't stop reading and I absolutely love that about your writing.
For a critique point of view, there were just some awkward sentences that need to be looked over because of the wording. I got the point you were trying to make, but a few of them just either needed to be reworded or tenses needed to change, but nothing too major :)
The layout is simple, but it works and on the plus side, I can actually read it :) So amazing work darling! Keep it up and I do look forward to reading some more of this :)
