The Aquatic Maiden - Comments

I love the way this story goes right to the surprises. It was just wonderful!

I've always dreamed of writing a story underwater... I recently started but it was too hard! Reading your story was lovely. I love how shy haimi is!

an amazing story! your writing is brilliant! :)

I loved this to shreds! My laptop died halfway through reading it and I don’t think I’ve ever moved faster to find my charger (: The first line was simple and it really got me reading. The name ‘Haimi’ is really unique and it suited the story perfectly. All your characters developed smoothly and there were never any awkward parts. By the ending, I really felt as if they could be real.

When Haimi is rediscovering herself for the first time as a mermaid all the description is wonderful; for some reason I love how her skin is described as milky. When she first finds the other mermaids, the story really becomes an adventure and I constantly had these pictures in my head that were crafted from your words. The love you’ve created between Haimi and Adrian was so powerful and it left me longing for something like that.

And finally, the ending had me grinning. I suppose I should have seen it coming but no, it was a great surprise. You most definitely have some talent and a way with words and this should have waaaay more comments than it does. I cannot think of an ounce of criticism!

Absolutely beautiful and magical story <3

This story is simply wonderful<3

I love how you captured the mermaid life, if I didn’t know better I'd say you were one! But hey, maybe you were in one of your past lives =P

I've been meaning to comment from the moment I read it but like always I forgot=P I just reread it and had to tell you how much I enjoyed it! How on earth can you remember such a magical dream? I envy you =P I only remember bits and pieces from mine if anything at all..

Speechless O.o

This was nothing short of absolutely BRILLIANT! And I'm terribly sorry that now you have to see like three of my comments in a row because now it looks like I'm a creepy profile/story stalker (which I am, heheh).

You have such a wonderful talent for writing your descriptions and making your characters interact! I can't believe this only took like a day!! Holy hell, I could never write something like this with such short notice! Actually, I just don't think I could write something like this, period! You took the wonderful fantastical world of mermaids and nurtured it into the very fairy tale that I've always wanted to read!

I <3 this! :D :D :D :D :D

NOO!! Okay, so far this is AWESOME AND SO MAGICAL AND SO FULL OF YOUR AMAZING TALENT! I've only read like a 10th of it and now my mother is calling me down to go somewhere so I can't finish reading it now. But I shall! And then I will babble more about it's awesomeness! :D

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

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