The Guilt and the Shame - Comments

Ok, I got my tissues all over the place here and snot running out my nose. TMI? Anyway, I loved it! I prefer the original ending to the alternate one myself. Of the ones I'd read for the contest that no longer exists, I'd say this one was my fave of those that I did read. Anyway, took me long enough to get in here to comment. I had read on my phone awhile back and couldn't comment, then forgot to do it. I'm sitting here this morning and realized I hadn't done it, so here I am. Shutting up now. :)

This is sadder and happier at the same time. That whole triangle mess of Jimmy, Brian, and Larissa was confusing as hell. And may I say one thing:

Fucking children cockblocking me.

I don't know...how to comment at the moment. While I won't lie and say this was an easy read, I will say it was a damn good one. All the heartbreaking stuff aside, this story was phenomenal. I was honestly kinda hoping I wouldn't read the ending that I did, but it worked. It made the story that much more powerful and I applaud you for even being able to write it. I know it was harder than hell on you and I don't think I could ever tap into this particular subject in my own stuff, so you definitely get extra brownie points for that.

Fucking brilliant work, dear. This has got to be another one of my favorite pieces of yours.<3

xoxo - Cali

normally i'd say the story was wonderful & put a smiley, but that just doesn't cover it for this particular story. This story was absolutely amazing. it made me laugh & cry & want to hug someone. it's honestly THE best story I think I've ever read on here & even if it hadn't been about Jimmy or Brian, & i came across it, I'd still think that way(:

I don't know what to say. It was great, heart wrenching but amazing. I think chapter three was... proper in the way that it ended accordingly. I don’t want to delve into a character, event or plotline breakdown like I normally would because it felt real through the words and I think that doing so would be an injustice to the characters in it. And also, I believe that I feel that way because parts of it were based on actual events and like any fan, I don’t want to… I don’t know, speak out of turn, perhaps but not necessarily because I know that I’m not wording this right.

I can honestly say, though, that this is the first time that I’ve read something and didn’t break it down in my head. Instead, I just… accepted what I read, trusting the writer completely instead of picking out things that I didn’t like or that I really liked or that I think should had been different or anything cynical like that. It was too powerful for me to be able to do that. The emotion was real and I felt it when I read it especially in the last chapter. It spoke and I think that it would had done that anyways even it wasn’t based on some truth and real people. Like, even if it was just original characters going through this, it would had been the same and that’s a hard thing to accomplish in my opinion.

All in all, chapter three was emotionally gut churning and didn’t just tug heartstrings, it pulled them out. The whole thing was brilliant, courageous, very brave and extremely well written. The story as a whole showed off not only your talent at creating a good plot and deep, realistic original character but it also showcased your ability to craft words and sentences into intense emotion. Very well done.

Oh my god, I loved it. Seriously. I am bawling my eyes out but it was a terrific end. I think this is one of the most brilliant things I've ever read. There was so much emotion in everything.

You did an amazing job. <3

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I still hate you. I could feel myself about to cry but never completely crying. I don't cry easily though so it means you did a good job. That was so beautiful...you really showed how sad, how painful it would be in a completely genuine way. I can see them all looking like that. I can see Zacky bursting out into a rage like that. It's all very believable, all very easy to see in the mind's eye. Amazing job, Sarah. <3

Oh my good god, this is so amazing. I have a feeling where this is going and while it's tearing at my heart, I'm so glad you have the guts enough to write about this.

I don't hate you or anything like that because you're a powerful writer and not afraid to touch on things that the rest of us cringe at the very thought of though I am kind of peeved at myself because of this chapter. For once in my life, I don't think that I can break it down completely in rational words. I even tried to let it sink in over night but to no avail. lol. So, I'm not even going to try to babble like normal.

I'm excited to see how this is going to end but I think that I'm dreading it more than anything. Not your writing of course, that's always fantastic. Just the subject matter is what is making me feel that while I'm curious, that I might not want to read it, if that makes sense. I'm going to read it. lol. Don't worry about that but there is a bit of fear that I have going into the last chapter. I don't think I'm making sense so I will shut the fuck up now. XD

First off, FUCK YOU. Now that we're past that, I quit. You make me look like a shit writer. Everything in there was beautiful. I just wish that she had said no to Brian....I wish that she would have said no and Jimmy....fucking....fuck fuck fuck. I don't think I can handle part three. I knew what was coming as soon as it got near the end and you mentioned Matt and Val getting married a few months ago....I hate you.

A part of me wants to tell you not to write part three. I'm not sure I can handle it. I'm pretty sure I may sob. lol. And let's be honest I try to avoid sobbing. But that's just me. I love how you wrote Jimmy and Larissa's relationship, and Brian's and her's. I mean, on one hand you want Brian to quit ruining shit. But also, they have a relationship as well. I don't know. It was awesome though, love. Great job. :) Update soon so we can all sob. :)

Oh lawd, I need a tissue! I can't even form a comment just now. I'll come up with one I'm sure. Just can't at the moment. *sniffle*

Oh my god, I am fucking sobbing. This was beyond amazing, and I am seriously heartbroken. Fuck.

I love every detail you put in with Jimmy. It just seems so him. This is honestly one of the best things I've ever read, and I can't wait for more.

Oh my God.My heart.It's breaking. o.o

This is utterly fucking GORGEOUS. Her relationship with Jimmy is just adorable. (Have I told you how much I love the way you write him?) And then there's Brian. I love Brian, but once again, I'm finding my reasons to want him to fuck off and not ruin things between people, lol.
The ending has me... well... I don't hate you, for one. I'm just going to stock up on tissues for part 3. I have a feeling I'll need them.

Definitely cannot wait for more of this.
(but I shall be patient)

....where is chapter two? I am incapable of posting some dissection of the chapter so yeah....there you go. I like the whole just lying in bed and smoking afterwards thing though.

This was amazing, as I told you it would be. It was an awesome start. And are you sure he laughed when she pulled his hair? I always imagined him snapping and saying, 'don't touch the hair'. Maybe a few tears if she pulled out a hair. XP. I don't blame her for feeling awkward, I would have too. I loved all of it, and couldn't imagined it being better. Awesome job, love. Can't wait for you to update.

I can understand why she felt awkward afterwards. In the club, she always has control. No touching, yadda, yadda, yadda. But with what happened, especially since she’s not had a one night stand, the inexperience of it might make her feel vulnerable and she’s too in her own head. While working each other up to the deed, she’s wondering if she thinks she does this all the time, what he thinks about her apartment and how it will reflect on her. If anything, it’s just insecurity. He had a genuine interest in her unlike most of the men that come in and just want to see her naked while he asked for her real name, something that threw her off her game momentarily. Plus, she likes him. Wondering what he thinks about her would mean, logically, that, like she said, she had a interest in him because he had an interest in her.

And with the end of this chapter, it makes me wonder what actually happened between the two other than their… first encounter. It's well written, like normal. lol. And I want to know more about where it's going and where they've been together. More. Now. XD

Interested to see what you have planned for the rest of this. Awesome so far Hun :)

Oh god. Oh god. Oh god. I fucking love you and I fucking love this story. I just really want to know what's going on. I really really really want to know.

I will bother you until this story is updated. You know that.

So...update. This is too much for me to wait.

Oh this is just...hell, I can't even put it to words. Loved it and can't wait for the rest. :)