Psychonaut - Comments

I'm totally 2 years late here, but damn.
This was spectacular, and I loved it.
Cheers.
-Apollo

I thought this was really interesting. I liked the comparison between the loneliness of the astronaut of the dream and that of the main character. I liked the comparison between the isolation the astronaut brought upon himself by escaping earth in his spaceship and the isolation of the main character brought upon by, possibly, his lifestyle, and his escape from his reality with the use of drugs. I also liked the comparison between the earth being destroyed so the astronaut can never go back and possibly the main character's world being destroyed because of his own actions and (even though the world still exists) it doesn't necessarily exist for him (probably because of metaphorical bridges he's burned in the past).

I told you that I was going to check out more of your writing. :D First off, I loved the layout; it was so creepy and definitely gave that sense of isolation. The title was brilliant too; I've never seen that word before in my life but it just seemed to capture the story in that one word. Your imagery in this piece was downright haunting, to be honest. As I read it, I started feeling more and more uncomfortable, like I was the one suffocating. The very idea for this story was just so unique and unsettling; it takes a lot to unsettle me so you did a great job with that. I loved that ending as well; it was a nice twist and I loved the little added touch of the kitten. This is honestly one of the best drabbles I've ever read; you captured so much emotion and depth in less than four hundred words. Absolutely brilliant.

This is quite amusing, but that scenario of being in space while the world is burning is something I've often thought of. Like what would it be like to be somewhat safe up there, while the world is burning, and what would it be like to come back down? Then, just in typing that, is that the kind of symbolism in the narration? He's on a high - the fire's burning - and then as his lungs are constricting, he's coming out of his high, feeling as that 'life' is leaving him and he's coming into his own again? If not, well, that maybe something new ;)

I also like how it was a dream, and he woke up - still lonely as ever - in a mansion which seems to keep reinforcing that loneliness. :) It's a very nice piece, and I like that emphasis on lonely. :) Tis a good write. :)

"You've Already Written It!" Prewrite Contest:

Layout: The layout was nice and fit the story. I liked the picture you used.

Content: The story was surprising and entertaining. I like how you used the whole " it-was-all-a-dream" concept...I can picture him after the dream doing something with his life. Cudos to you ;)

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: I liked all the symbolism, and your vocab was great. I didn't catch any mistakes.

Overall: I liked the story you told, and it was well written :)

Words cannot express my love for this story.
Seriously.
And where did you find that picture? It's amazing!