Phony - Comments

aww! Sorry about that!

and yay!

they are going back to the councelor!

Update SPoon!

Mm, this is interesting...the concept of it all I mean.
But like, the cool thing here is that even though you keep switching point of view's between characters--which by the way, I absolutely despise in stories--it still manages to fit in I suppose, you know?
They're both talking about the same things but from their own perspectives, which definetely adds a few kudos to the originality here.
And I have this odd little feeling that they're going to be seeing each other very soon.
But then again, I may be wrong...I usually am.
So anyway...
Update soon, yeah?

fuck-shit:

i really miss this story please update :D

I know, I know...try telling that to Kehli. xD
It's her turn to update.

But I think she's going through some tough times right now, so just hold on for a little bit longer, alright? :]

i really miss this story please update :D

I didn't like reading chapter 7, that was sad :(
GAH!!! What Happened?
Update soon! :)

Well, as promised, I've finally read the whole thing!

Haha, I'd started reading The Catcher In The Rye when I started reading this! Coooooooolies!

I'm enjoying this a lotlies! Good on Gerard for yelling at the therapist! I'd yell too!

whoa, i really like this.
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omg....what an interesting sotry...continue pls!

chapter 7 blew my brain out of my head and smacked the wall behind me.
it is that amazing



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kehliphobic.:

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This is beautifully written, i like the way at first glance Gerard and Frank seem like polar oposites, but if you dig deeper they are quite familar....

...." he started, glancing down at his paper. "Mr. Way...May I call you Gerard?"

"I'd prefer it if you didn't

Frank prefers frank. : )
Can't wait for next update.

keMMicallykiera:

i loved how they accidentally crossed each other's paths. i almost screamed at the computer in excitement. =]

so i have a bit of...hopefully helpful critisism, i guess. i'm just wondering why gerard reacted so harshly to the psycologist rubbing his back. i mean, i would be freaked out too, but i think you should maybe show a little more that his character doesn't like being touched or something before you do the screaming thing.

hope you don't kill me for that? ^
but seriously, this was amazing. i love this story.

I'd never hurt anyone who offers criticism to me! I welcome it, and I'm really glad you took the time to tell me. =]

Gerard doesn't necessarily dislike being touched - I was thinking that Gerard would be upset that he verbalized the thought of Frank, made him real and resurface in his life again, and the fact that the therapist wasn't completely believing him. Therefore, his emotions were on edge and some tiny little thing could inadvertently set him off.

Hope that makes sense. :]

Bad Luck.:

So, if I want a character yelling something, I don't necessarily have to have everything in all caps, just italicize it?

Thank you so much - I'll make the necessary changes. :D

Oh yeahhh. You go, Gerard. Get out of that place.

Frank Iero. An image of his smiling face glancing up at me as we were laying side-by-side on the grass. His eyes were laughing as was his face. I knew I had to be grinning as well - his laugh was so infectious you couldn't help but to laugh along with him, even if the subject wasn't particularly funny. I remembered how his beautiful orbs were shining, a glint in them that told me he was never happier in his entire life.

I think that paragraph was just totally it, you know, what made the chapter shine. I could really see Frank in my head, it was such a wonderful description, and it was very well done.

How dare he not believe me! I told this from the bottom of my heart; I was laying out my entire soul and past for him to see, and all he did was sit back and not believe a word I said.

You're making me hate him now, this Mr. Smith character. Pshhhhh. How could he not believe a word Gerard said? That's what bothers me about some therapists. Sometimes they think you're so crazy and that it's not true. Pfft.

And poor Gerard. Spilling his heart out and crying. And the stupid pedophile pervert of a therapist. He doesn't deserve that.

"THAT'S BECAUSE I FUCKING AM! I DON'T NEED SOME FUCKING SICK PERVERT TRYING TO SEDUCE ME IN THE GODDAMN PLACE! I BET THIS ISN'T EVEN A REAL THERAPIST'S OFFICE - I DOUBT YOU EVEN HAVE A DEGREE IN PSYCHOLOGY! YOU CAN FORGET ME EVER COMING BACK TO THIS FUCKING PLACE, YOU PRICK!"

I loved his little speech at the end. But a story editor once told me not to capitalize everything if someone's yelling. Either just put an exclamation mark at the end, or italicize it if you want that effect.

But yes. This chapter was awesome. Power to Gerard! You go and find some not perverted therapist who might care. But yeahhh! Can’t wait for more ^__^

Page claim!!

I dub thee....

BLOOOD!!! 0.0

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Gee got mad....

Gee got really mad...

I'm really wondering what happened between them!!

i loved how they accidentally crossed each other's paths. i almost screamed at the computer in excitement. =]

so i have a bit of...hopefully helpful critisism, i guess. i'm just wondering why gerard reacted so harshly to the psycologist rubbing his back. i mean, i would be freaked out too, but i think you should maybe show a little more that his character doesn't like being touched or something before you do the screaming thing.

hope you don't kill me for that? ^
but seriously, this was amazing. i love this story.

RomanticChemicalette:

like, whoa! omfg, wait, so all the Pencet stuff is int he past! OH! omigod! DAAAAAMN you guys are good.

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like, whoa! omfg, wait, so all the Pencet stuff is int he past! OH! omigod! DAAAAAMN you guys are good.

Yay!
Great update!