I thought this was very very good. The story you picked seemingly only had two characters, and I think you were really resourceful in picking characters who were fleetingly mentioned, but still very important. I know I wouldn't have thought of doing something like that. I liked how you fleshed out why Kary moved so much, too, and added a third character, her dad, in there. Since children's and mother's perspectives are so different, I think you really did a good job of making this your own. The dialogue was mirrored perfectly, (I appreciate the accuracy) and I like how the two moms pinky promised at the end, just like the two daughters. The title fit like a glove, and it carried on the theme of growing up too quickly that comes both from your intro and the other story's.
I think the only real criticism I can give is that in East Coast;'s story, Ally was spelled Alley. Other than that, this is amazing.
That was the cutest story ever. You are an amazing writer. I almost cried myself....... You have a very good way of describing things! Amazing job, you are truly talented, that is obvious!
I thought this was very very good. The story you picked seemingly only had two characters, and I think you were really resourceful in picking characters who were fleetingly mentioned, but still very important. I know I wouldn't have thought of doing something like that. I liked how you fleshed out why Kary moved so much, too, and added a third character, her dad, in there. Since children's and mother's perspectives are so different, I think you really did a good job of making this your own. The dialogue was mirrored perfectly, (I appreciate the accuracy) and I like how the two moms pinky promised at the end, just like the two daughters. The title fit like a glove, and it carried on the theme of growing up too quickly that comes both from your intro and the other story's.
I think the only real criticism I can give is that in East Coast;'s story, Ally was spelled Alley. Other than that, this is amazing.