Blank Canvas. - Comments

hey
yeah, i've commented on this before
I was just wondering...ack this sounds rude, i don't mean it rudely, just if you were ever going to update, because I'm like insanely in love ith this story.

yeesh, that sucks. OCD = not fun. :(

I love this. It's really good. More soon, I'm hoping. :]]

I really love that you wrote this. My older sister has some mental illnesses which occasionally seem to present themselves as OCD, but aren't. The things in here are true to what I know about living with someone with a mental illness. Like how the signs and signals just show up quietly, without a big fuss or dramatics. You almost get used to randomly finding someone baking a billion blueberry muffins, or moving everything in the room until it's just right. That's just how it works. It means a lot that you're willing to write about mental illness, and not in the cliched way.

Dude, this sounds like an awesome story!!
CAn't wait for more :]
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AmazingGreat Start!
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AWWW!!!!!
HE HAS OCD!!!!
Poor Brendon....
I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!
ITS SO AWESOME!!!
MORE PLEASE!!!

Lovesick.:

But I was wondering, have you seen My Blueberry Nights? :cheese: I'm 99.9% sure the choice of muffin flavor had a different reason but still I had to ask.

No... I haven't. The muffin flavor was completely random.

Ironic ending. Maybe Ryan is the sick one not Brendon. I suppose there's the rest of the story to find that out.

I'm still getting used to the impersonal raw [?] style of the beginnings but the story is adorable. Well it's not really a story yet, it's just an introduction. So I can't really say that much about it, I don't want to say that much about it actually.

But I was wondering, have you seen My Blueberry Nights? :cheese: I'm 99.9% sure the choice of muffin flavor had a different reason but still I had to ask.

Forgive me if this review sounds disoriented or...stupid...I have a very bad sinus infection and I keep sneezing and coughing up yellow mucus. No I am sure you didn't need to know all that, but I digress. Anyway. I have read a lot of your stories, and I truely love your writing style, but this story...I don't know...it didn't have the same kind of emotion that your other stories have.

Your first two paragraphs were amazing. Well written, interesting, that sense of vagueness without a million unanswered questions. It almost felt like a song, with a rhytmic and hypnotic beat that made me what to read more. However, beyond that, the song seemed to have wavered a bit. Ryan seemed a little on the bland side, which could be because of his trying to hide his frustrations with Brendon. The whole exchange between the two was a little lacking. Maybe cause I am slightly compairing it to As the Clock Strikes and Icarus and the Bird of Peace.

Maybe the dryness was supposed to be there, but I don't know. I don't think it was the best of yours that I have read, but it wasn't bad. It was interesting and I like that you tried something different. It was overally pretty good.

I really enjoyed this. The realistic little details in your writing really make the scenes come to life and make the characters so easy to relate to. You are so talented at putting little quirks and feelings into words.

It's just amazing. That's all I can say.

I like the beginning of this.
I like how you don't make Brendon's obsessions/compulsions seem so dramatic, but rather bring them up casually.

My favorite lines:

feeling heavy

But that wasn't when he started puking.

mouth tightened and his teeth pressed tightly against each other.

thinking of every sexy thing he could to maintain his erection.

He thought about what would happen, for a moment, if he left his pajamas on the floor. It was a mean thought and he really had no right to be thinking mean thoughts.

New story.
Multi-chapter.
Brendon has OCD. It's never been extremely severe, but now it's lead to a bout of bulimia.
Ryden, Peterick.
Set about a year and a half ago.

Happy [?] reading.

xoxox
-Dru