I really liked this. Gotta love sibling rivalry. Very creative ideas and writing. Good job, and good luck!
July 20th, 2011 at 09:00pm
I really liked this. Even though I hate seeing them fight too. :( I enjoyed the descriptions and the character of Riley is very believable and relatable.
I saw few minor spelling errors but this one stuck out the most: "Sam threw the first bunch," haha, I've got a feeling you were meaning 'punch'.
Anyway, I like that this was different from all the other stories. It wasn't happy or cheesy or anything and it didn't need to be, just a good ol' Sam and Dean brotherly scrap out. And I love this song, by the way. Good luck with the contest!