Methane Skies - Comments

YES! I love the turn of events. It definitely caught me by surprise. :)

I'm getting just a tad bored with the Party Poison visiting Conrad in the freezer and her kicking his ass. She's not supposed to be superwoman, and sometimes I think that her character is a little too strong. She needs some faults other than her stubbornness and loyal to BL/ind. And I don't mean a tragic past--I mean character flaws.

Anyway, I may be being a little harsh, so take what I say with more than a few grains of salt. No matter what I say I really love this story. I'd def one of my faves right now.

I have yet to see any constructive criticism on this site, so here we go:

Though your first chapter is rich with words (either you spent a lot of time looking up synonyms or you pay way too much attention in english), thats about all I get. The tone of the narration is kind of lacking in personality, and all I hear when I read is this big, dramatic, booming voice, which I guess is a cause of all the facy wording (which I'm not saying is a bad thing). The only bad thing about it is that I feel disconected from the charaters because, even though it isn't first person, the narration isn't getting any of the characters thoughts or feelings. If you put in a sentace or two that really high lighted what the main character's personality is like, then I would probaly get into the story a little more. Also: I have no idea if its worth reading on because you haven't posted up a summary. I have no idea what the story is about!

okay, now that that is out of the way; I can see you have some great potential, I'd just like to see a better connection with the characters. But hey, I just the first chapter, so I could be wrong. But then again, it is kind of important to get the readers attention in the first chapter....

But anyways, enough with that. Good job with the vocab. Keep writing :)

i like this story alot <3

I'm sorry I don't always comment but I have to say this story amazing me and fills me with excitement.
Conrad and Party I'm thinking will have something going on even though he's a dick
War Ghost is really nice to Conrad but I feel bad for how Party treats her sometimes, but knowing that Ghoul is nice to her makes up for it.
I can't wait for the next update keep up the good work :D
Clara
xxx

Character depth ftw.

I like this a lot. It still has a ton of great potential. I think that htis is well thought out and that the writing is good. :)

I love where this is going. Keep it up, guys. :)

Awesome chapter. It's nice to see what it's like through Emma's eyes.

This is a great first chapter. I'm definitely anticipating more. :)

THIS IS AWESOME!!
I can't wait for the the next chapter
:D
Am I the first comment?
Sweet <3