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They finally kissed yay!! They're just too cute!!

Loved it!!!! I agree with the person above that you write Brooks so well...next muse? :) mooore please!!

Yayayayayay they kissed! Ah, that made me so happy to see Nicky overcome his shyness and do that. This chapter was awesome! Can't wait for your next update! :)

keep it coming girl :)

Go Nicky! :) I am so glad he just did it! Loved the update as usual can't wait for more!
Amanda

YAY! They finally kissed! Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next update!

Omg- I'm on the freaking train to work and trying to hold back a squeal-damn girl

AHHH! Go Nicky! I can't wait for the next update.

Oh my god, a Nicky story! You have no idea how much I love you for this. I just adore that boy and his cuteness, shyness, and generally adorable self! This is so cute and damn romantic, I almost can't stand it! You can't just leave it off with him kissing her!! You neeeed to update soon, please!! <3

legit.
no other words for the chapter than le- effing- git.
seriously, that was epic, and seriously needs to be updated like now because you cant leave us hanging like that

awwwww they kissed :] cant wait for the next chapter i really love this story :]

I have so much to catch up on. So I'm just going to keep a running commentary going as I read through the chapters; hopefully it'll make sense to you lol.

Chapter 2
"New York was one of Nicky’s favorite cities to visit. It always reminded him of how small things seemed at home in Sweden - how clean and orderly. But New York was more exciting."
I laughed. What an amazing comparison. And I can't be the only one who caught the implications of that statement. Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but that's some great foreshadowing, along with a commentary lol. I'm a little offended by Mike's "you've got not game" though; it makes me all defensive of Nicky. It's all in good fun, but still...!

I love how witty your writing is. It always cracks me up.
“What friend?” Mike asked. Ninety-nine percent of their social circle was shared. The other one percent was Devin.
“He did send me a picture from lunch. They went to a place I used to love in school.”
“He’s in love with you.”
So perfect. It's amazing. And the dialogue with the mini photo shoot? Priceless. You create these snappy rhythms that work so well, and just keep the story full of humour without interrupting the flow. I only wish my dialogue was as funny and as effortless as yours.

Yay the photos! Haha. It's starting...I like how awkward the facebook chatting is by the way. Having Nicky's internal debate was a nice touch, and that kind of translates into their talking. I'm sensing that it will become less awkward and more forward though, am I right?

Chapter 3
Oh my god you make Nicky so cute. Looking at jewelery and scarves? I squealed like a little kid seeing chocolate cake. It's absolutely adorable that he's thinking about her so much, and building up a relationship in his head enough to look at gifts lol. And then Mike calling him out on it? :D

Oh, and
"Nicky considered his own jeans, sweater and pea coat and felt decidedly Old Navy about himself."
What a great way to describe him. I've always thought of Nicky like that, especially with that hair and the baby face lol.

Have you ever been on the NYC campus? Just curious. I know you travel a lot...Anyway, you had Nicky pick out the best gift ever. Something personal and thoughtful, but doesn't scream out anything too much; none of that suggestive-of-their-possible-relationship vibes. I'm totally keeping this in mind next time I go shopping for an acquaintance. Who says you don't learn anything useful in fanfiction?

You know, it's rather hard to keep this comment going. I get so absorbed in your writing and your characters that I kind of forget reality lol. I love that about your stories. You of course describe the guys spot on, exactly like how I imagined them -- if much more detailed than I could -- but you develop all your characters so strongly. There are distinct personalities and qualities to each person. They're extremely realistic, and I find myself just getting lost in the plot. But that's also something you're very good at: you use your characters to progress the plot, instead of having the story go along and the characters filling in the missing pieces. I enjoy that about your stories, because it brings such a distinctive style and narrative voice to your writing.

I completely agree with Mel; Brooks Laich is such a sexy sexy man. It's the eyes, I'm telling you. Maybe he can be next for your story radar?...Too soon? Ok. That will come later lol.

Chapter 4
LOOOOOOOOOLLL they gossip like real housewives. Best line ever, because we all know it's true. There's hardcore bromance going on, but you know that entire team probably does act like high school girls, gossiping in the locker and hotel rooms. But gross, Ovi. I'm sorry, I hate the guy so much. He's just disgusting. I hope he doesn't ruin things for Nicky, although I'm pretty sure he's going to. He's that kind of guy. But at least everyone else has elected to help poor old Backstrom. I'm just a little wary of what that entails.

"This photo is the best sex I've ever had."
...how sad is it that may or may not ring true for some of us? Too much info? Probably. But who cares? The idea of a napping Nicky, topless like that...mmmmmmm....Sorry, give me a moment to gather myself.

The comments on the picture were fantastic. Her boss was the crowning glory lol. And using tumblr to get it out there? How accurate. I'm always wondering where those crazy personal pictures and what not are coming from.

Wow, two chapters in one day? You should applaud yourself, and get a medal. I guess those plane flights were inspirational, eh?

Chapter 5
Nicky is moving a snail's pace, but Brian has a point. Even us fans have rituals during playoffs, and really don't want to screw that up. Any other time, I'd be upset she's not taking the initiative to ask him out, but you've timed this perfectly. Well done, because most people don't like hearing my "I am woman, hear me roar" speech lol.

Water getting dumped on Mike? Awesomeness on a stick. That is all I have to say about that. But Nicky's awkward confession to him is even better. It's the push Nicky needs to FINALLY ask her out lol. On a side note, kudos for keeping up with Nicky's broken English. Once again, I commend you on your character personalities. You keep them consistent while at the same time having them develop and experience realistic emotions; like Devin "dying" at Nicky's message hahaha.

Chapter 6
Once again, Tumblr!!! You're right; everyone on tumblr is a 16 year old girl on the inside. And I shamelessly admit I'd probably be acting the exact same way if I saw a photo of Backstrom sleeping topless with a sign that said "Hey Devin" lol. I'd be all over that like...okay I can't think of a semi-clean, appropriate simile here, but give me a break. It's almost 2.00am and I'm typing with an injured thumb from work...

"You never know who's looking till there's something for them to see."
Those may the wisest words I've ever read on Mibba. And Devin's reaction to Nicky's comments are just golden. You're making her awful cute too. I may just end up vomiting at the end of this story lol. At least you have goofball Mike and horny Mel keeping things at a tolerable level.

Chapter 7
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH they're finally meeting!!!!!!!! Screw Ovi and his computer girlfriend comments; she's coming alive from the computer after the game!

Even though I already know the outcome of the game (and the series), I still find myself tensing up as I read. You keep things so grounded, and write like a real fan watching the games. Well, I know you did, so I'm already jealous, but at least you're sharing the experience. Completely appreciate that :)

We already know how magnificent Mike Green is, but I have to bow down to him in this story. I hope he and Mel hook up at some point in the story. Even though they're the best friends, they're quickly becoming my favourites because how entertaining they are. And Mike breaking the tension? I had no idea how that was going to go, but he did well. And I think my suspicion was right: Nicky and Devin are going to be so cute and sweet I'm going to get diabetes. The intense hugging and inhaling and what not...sheesh woman!

But they have finally met! I cannot wait to see where you take this now. I'm thinking there's going to be more drama, of course. And Devin has to deal with her new found fame. They haven't even officially gone out on a date yet. Are you going to take the story to where they're kicked out? I think it might work, having Devin in Nicky's life at such a crucial point in time. Good development for their relationship. Maybe that's when he'll ask her to be his girlfriend officially? I don't know, I'm just throwing out randomness right now. Really, I should get to bed because I'm pretty sure I stopped making sense about two paragraphs into this comment. I apologize for the long and rambling nature of this, but I felt like I needed to get all caught up. And your stories deserve so much more love than they get, so this is me attempting to rectify the situation. Even though this was completely useless, I hope it encourages you to write some more and post another update! I'm so glad I shared this idea with you, because you've taken something so simple and made it spectacular. Can't wait for more!

awh, so cute
:)

possibly the sweetest 'meeting' of two characters you've written! lovin this story!!

Yay! So happy they finally met in RL. Can't wait for more.

yay! they finally met :]

Loved it! Update sooooon!!

They met!! Love this one, very nicely written, update soon!

that was amazing. i love mike and his awkward comment!
okay you cant just leave us there, when its all folding out!!!!! so update soon please!

yaaaay! i was giddy through the entire thing waiting for them too meet! i had to stop myself from reading ahead soo gooood.