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  • How.About.Them.Stars

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    It's pretty good, you just need to separate everything into stanzas just to make it easier for people to read and it'll also make your work look 10xs more professional.
    May 4th, 2011 at 08:56pm
  • Lee Hi;

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    this is good just watch ur punctuation cuz it got a little confusing towards the end on what she was thinking and what he was saying
    May 2nd, 2011 at 12:41am
  • I Feel Like Koda

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    You should definately keep writing. This is awesome.
    April 30th, 2011 at 04:19am
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