Put an X on the Floor - Comments

The plot does thicken! Three becomes two... (not that I'm an evil sonovabitch but, I'd like to see her knock Party Poison down a few pegs... maybe all the way down to six foot beneath the ground). I don't know why, but I just get a funny feeling that Party isn't all he seems. Then again, that's the beauty of your story, the grey areas that you've smudged to cover every side, life isn't just good and evil, and everybody has personal reasons for acting in certain ways.

I'm really looking forward to the history of BL/Ind you hinted at here, the idea that the company is a lot older than it seems. I always thought that, that it's an evolved form of... something, something that was originally created to help the people but has taken the idea to an extreme. My friends and I personally think that Apple is responsible for BL/Ind... they've got the whole white sterile thing going on, and this whole 'easy for the people' approach. Apple is evil, and one day, I'll prove it, and save the world!

*ahem* Sorry about that.

Just, you know, bring on the fun, my dear, I can't wait to see where this leads.

Show Pony is such a thinker, its intriguing, a feeling in his bones... It suggests something. So BL/Ind can recreate people, perfect replicas or not, and he's thinking something is wrong, and maybe they could replicate without the original copy... It seems to me that you're suggesting something huge here and I'm missing out on something. Its confusing and intriguing in the best possible way where I find myself thinking on this story at the strangest times, I love that. So Gunner has made it to Dr D's, is thus the safe haven they've been after? Or has he fallen into soneone's ploy?

Aah, THAT'S what this story was called! I started reading a while ago, but was in a rush and forgot to subscribe. I couldn't remember for the life of me what this called, but now...I have found it. I am in love with the way you have written it, a bit confusing but uniquely and beautifully so. I just love it, the characters, the words. It's wonderful. Really.

I keep forgetting that you killed Jet Star, every time its mentioned it makes me grumble and sniffle, poor guy. So Kobra Kid has a feeling, a tell, something wicked this way cones. I would not put it past you to destroy the Fabulous Killjoys even further... The line about charisma was fantastic. And so Gunner wishes to go further for a complete stranger, such a precious soul, although Dr Deaf-Defying 'bloke' ah its wonderful seeing such English idioms on mibba. Will he be able to help? He must have got the 'dr' title somehow.

I do throughly enjoy the confusion you weave with your words, its a very clever ploy, making your audience question everyone and everything. There's no definite good or evil in this world, that's always judged by the character, and even they're not sure. Its wonderful. Also, very intriguing 'rumour' idea, very curious to see how she plays a part. Although if only Jet Star knew and now he's dead... What are you doing to us?!

Cellophane Gunner is a very interesting character. Is it blind faith in the Killjoys? Yet he says he has seen them risk their lives for others. Can we trust him? Poor little lost girl, frown into the deep end of the big bad Killjoy world. Will she make it in this harsh world? Strangely im rooting for her.

That was... incredibly telling, and yet... incredibly vague. Oh, you are wonderful, absolutely brilliant, this narrative style is so fascinating, its really engrossing. I have a feeling that Dr. Death is a lot more than he makes out to be, like he has a lot more connections, is far higher up, knows more than he should... he seems almost dangerous. But now you've gone and added all this 'Show Pony's from the future' thing and completely thrown things on their head! Like you said, how can someone know he's from the future when he himself does not? Now I have some pretty interesting Terminator crossover ideas going on, ha! Love that movie. Anyway, moving on swiftly. What in the name of Bob is going on? This is getting so exciting. Can't wait for more.

I'm really enjoying how this story is written, there's a confusion to it, yes, but it just heightens the dangers of such a world. Plus, it helps to portray this awkward and yet wholly intriguing way you have of 'throwing the blame' so to speak. There's so much doubt and confusion out there, so little trust, and you've left me doubting the truth. Although, I always doubted those Killjoys, BL/Ind was set up to restore order, they just believed their hype far too much.

This is great :)

NO JET STAR!!! I can't believe it! He got ghosted!!!! HE'S DEAD!! :'( *deep breath* well, so Misery is a robot? Drac? Spy from BL/i? Which makes no sense because she said she wasn't from Battery City…but she could have lied….
loved it :)

Okay, I'm sorry that I haven't commented in a while. But here I go… wow, just wow. That was good! I'm so confused with all these Dracs being nice and Gasoline finding these bracelets, to objects flying at people. It's cool. Cant wait to read the next chapter :)

Okay, now I'm confused. Is that supposed to the boy that runs around with them in the music videos? Cuz Ive also heard that the "boy" is a girl. Unless I'm just missing out on something because that is also very likely. Good update! Live how this story stands out more than the rest ;) keeps it going and interesting beyon belief. And oh yeah, merry Christmas!

comment time!!!!! now I'm starting to think Gerard, I mean Party Poison, is really bad and evil like BL/ind. He acts like Mr. Tough Guy and is utterly and perfectly rude, which just makes this all the more interesting and makes him very questionable. As for the others I cannot wait to see how evilly they get portrayed as well, if thats what you were going for….this girl seems relatable because I would have defiantly spit up the water, and not just swallowed it like a smart person would have done ((no sexual reference intended))

I kind of feel bad, because I'm the only person who cares to comment…and if I knew how to rate a story I would (but thats just me being a blonde that can't figure it out).
Anyways, I'm excited! I expected the Fabulous Killjoys to kill her, I guess it's safe to say I'm shocked again. And like always update soon, because I'll be waiting to leave another comment :)

Yes! Another update! Very interesting how they just killed her, was no expecting that. Please update soon!!!

oh, it sounds like a good start! Even though I do like romances I think one with a sad ending is in need :) Can't wait to read more