I'm here as a judge for the Pick a Sentence, Write About It contest.
While the teenage pregnancy plot line might be a little cliche, I thought it was interesting that you decided to have the story take place a bit of a ways into her pregnancy instead of when she just found it. It helped develop everything a little more quickly, and also allow you to do more with the story than just deal with pure emotions, if that makes sense.
However, I felt like there was a ton of stuff going on in this chapter and it felt almost like it was a bit glossed over. I know you had said it was going to be a two-shot in the summary, but because we never got the second chapter, things felt underdeveloped. You touched on the rape, but it seemed like it was sort of just thrown in there as a "reason" for the pregnancy, you mentioned CJ, and then his funeral, but we never got more than that. There was a lot of things that almost didn't feel like they made sense because they weren't explored further, so it was hard to really understand what was going on. Like I said, if there was more than one chapter, maybe we would have gotten more. But because I only had the one chapter to go off of, it felt like it was a bit lacking.
While the teenage pregnancy plot line might be a little cliche, I thought it was interesting that you decided to have the story take place a bit of a ways into her pregnancy instead of when she just found it. It helped develop everything a little more quickly, and also allow you to do more with the story than just deal with pure emotions, if that makes sense.
However, I felt like there was a ton of stuff going on in this chapter and it felt almost like it was a bit glossed over. I know you had said it was going to be a two-shot in the summary, but because we never got the second chapter, things felt underdeveloped. You touched on the rape, but it seemed like it was sort of just thrown in there as a "reason" for the pregnancy, you mentioned CJ, and then his funeral, but we never got more than that. There was a lot of things that almost didn't feel like they made sense because they weren't explored further, so it was hard to really understand what was going on. Like I said, if there was more than one chapter, maybe we would have gotten more. But because I only had the one chapter to go off of, it felt like it was a bit lacking.
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