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  • razor2rosary

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    wow....it's...marvelous....^_^

    more??
    *new reader...^_^
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:50am
  • space cadet glow.

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    i lost the review i wrote. DDD: -eyetwitch- oh well, it wasn't that long anyway... -rewrites-

    you know how beautiful i think this is. In Love

    i just love the whole story. i'm sure it's something that everyone can definitely relate to, chasing the 'fairies' in hopes of making wishes. bringing that naive need to have the wish come true to teenage years really made the story seem even more magical.

    you could really feel her pain as she gripped the fairy and remembered everything. the italics were a brilliant touch for this and gave it an even deeper feel. it's very real, yet deals with it in an almost abstract kind of way. [okay, wrong word, but i'm feeling completely inarticulate at the moment, sorry.]

    just one thing to recommend - and it's purely grammatical:

    People who don't have homes, who don't have families parents shouting, shouting...

    i think there needs to be some kind of punctuation between 'families' and 'parents'. i realise the italics does separate them, but i personally think it may need something else (just an extra comma or something). but if you want to separate it that way because of the story, then of course feel free and just disregard this. :shifty

    just so you know, this comment wasn't quite as good as my first one. sorry. x.x
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:46am
  • the antihero.

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    Oh my
    That was so, so beautiful.

    Seriously; it's so beautiful that I'm tempted to spam the comment thread, in hopes of granting you morewishes stars.

    I love the... not naivety, of the girl, but more of a sad longing for such. As if she wishes she could be that naive and youthful again. That's the part that's really heart-wrenching; that something as small as a memory of a 'fairy' as a child is really a metaphor for the loss of happiness.
    Or perhaps I just read way too much into that :/

    I really love the translations between what she 'has' that other people don't, and the italics descriptions of her feelings.

    Eloquent, poetic, and just beautiful. (Yes; I'm aware that I say that word too much.)

    (And don't laugh at me for subcribing. It makes your ratings go up, and this DEFINITELY deserves a higher one!)

    I can think of nothing more to say, other than that I love this.
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:44am
  • Scribbles

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    Sharooona. Cry
    I felt. Everything.
    I saw the faces, scornful, laughing.
    It was short, but I like it, I really do.
    I knew from the Describe THIS thread that you're an amazing writer, and it shocks me that I never checked out anything by you. In Love
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:33am
  • nothing.

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    Wow.
    That was amazing.
    The detail was perfect, and the length really works.
    Your use of italics put the icing on the cake.
    Awesome
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:31am
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