Forbidden Blood - Comments

Oh why thank you :)

I've just finished reading the second chapter, and I'm in love! It's a very good story, and I can't wait to read the rest of it! :D

I'm glad you enjoy it, but I am going to make a little change to the first few chapters

Its pretty good so far but I am only on the second chapter.
:) :P :D * * *

Thanks and it will all be explained, trust me you aren't the first person to have questions

Well time for my review.

Like every story it has its good things and its bad things. The first thing to comment on is the complete lack of back story. While reading this I realized I knew almost nothing about the characters or their pasts. When Deanna said she was a queen I pretty much thought "what the f***? When did this happen?" Another thing is Deanna and Jessica's relationship, how did they meet and when? Why was Deanna sent and why her?

Another thing to think about just for decorative purpose is a custom layout of some sort. Your story is good but it is rather bland to look at. You're story may get some more attention if you do try and do that.

I've hammered enough on the bad things time for a positive note. Your story line is very good. It is more unique and creative than most vampire fics I have read. Most seem to be a rip off of Twilight (not dissing either of them). I am enjoying it so far and I am going to continue reading this until this story has been completed.

Your story I have to say, even though I hate this expression, it has potential to be a very good story. With some tweaking it could be excellent. Keep on writing you have a talent for it.

Thank you very much :)

I've made it to chapter 2 so far. I plan on reading the rest of it soon. But so far I think it is good. You use good details and really show the predator senses of a vampire in there. I don't get Jessica's heritage yet but I'm sure it will be explained in later chapters. Deanna and Jessica have a strange relationship..but it is good so far :)

Characters surely do come in. I promise this

MY THOUGHTS? Well, I sure love it. I recognize it because I think I read most of this when you sent it to me last year, but it's still really good! I can't wait till more characters come in :D

yay! this was so good Deanna!

Why thank you :)

FOREVER LOVE! <3