Spring Grace - Comments

I'm here as a judge for the Pick a Sentence, Write About It contest.

This was a cute story Tragic at the end, but cute nonetheless. I thought the way you chose to write for the prompt was really interesting. The concept of a wish coming true is really open-ended, and I thought you picked a really interesting way to go about it.

I liked that you decided to tie in her physical health with the blooming of the flowers in Spring. It was a really unique way for the wish to be worked in, and also an interesting plot device, since you were able to use them to show how fragile she really was when Michael picked them.

Th only thing that threw me off a little was not really knowing the ages of the characters. It seemed like the story was set quite a few years ago, judging from the dialogue, so it would make sense to marry young. But it also felt like the characters were really young from how they were interacting, so that confused me. I think it would have been helpful to be more clear on that so that the marriage thing didn't seem like it came out of nowhere and made things really confusing.

Thanks for entering!

This was a good story. :)

I loved this story, the layout fit with the plot. Also there were no spelling errors. Good job :)

I really adored this story, honestly. :)

Layout:
I think the layout fit the theme of the story very well, and even though it was very bright, a little too bright, I thought it worked. :)

Grammar & spelling:
Flawless, as usual. :) I like the vocabulary you used here too.

Content and character development:
For some reason, other people didn't seem to understand the whole flowers thing. I thought it was actually a pretty brilliant idea, her being as healthy as the flowers were. Very original, and I thought it kind of obvious, so I found it a little strange that other people didn't seem to pick up on it. I thought story was great, definitely keep writing. :D

this is a beautiful story. I love the wording and everything. It is truly magnificent!!!

I agree with the above commenters that it was girly but it was a great and well imagined story. It seemed poetic and had a fairy tale like feel to it. Plus I'm biased since one of the pictures that inspired you was a picture I took ^_^

Well...At first, you know what i was thinking..
("Flowers....Gardens....Fairies....Love...Girliness...NO! WHYS THIS HAPPENING TO ME? WHAT SIN HAVE I COMMITED?? GET AWAY!! GET AWAY!!!! -SCREAMS- ")

And then, when i was about to shrivel up and die, you surprised me with the sudden drama. Overall, you could say i loved it. Its awesomely written, though i believe the details about nature and its beauty (The flowers, trees, wind, atmosphere...etc) should've been explained even more (i love adjectives <3).

Good job on this. Its epic. *Gives thumbs up* ^^

All the people above I disagree with I love All of it and especially the flowers part cause it's sad but explanatory I love it good luck xxx

I don't know what to say about this but I'm going to tell you what I think.

This was too happy and I think it was kind of rushed.
I know it's just a story, but I couldn't understand the concept of her getting mad at Micheal just because he picked flowers from her garden outside her window and then instantly she got sick again.
At first, you made her seem as if she was a little kid; someone that wasn't old enough to get married.
It was some what poetic and I loved that, it was beautiful.

I think you did a good job, overall.
But I wish you spend more time into putting more details into it as to why she was so upset.

Don't get me wrong though, I loved your story.
Good luck in the contest

First off; what's with the colorful, happy and girly layout? Are you trying to kill me or what? ;D On a more serious note, the story was very girly but not bad at all. In someways you could say that it was slightly poetic. Keep up the good work!

First comment!!! Its a magnificently done story. I loved it.