On the Set - Comments

I wish you'd continue this stor. It would be an amazing one

This is the first thing I read on mibba outside of my friend's work.
Really, really loved this. It's well written and sweet, and the sex was really well-timed. The pace of this one-shot was the best; you led up to a great ending!
Great read, all in all. :D

Very well paced..
It's not rushed, and I love it for just that.
Keep up the awesome :)

WOW!!! This is great!!! Hot!!! I loved the way you developed the plot & the insight you gave on the characters. It was perfect. A really great one-shot!

<3 this was beautiful

Let me say right off the bat that I love your layouts! They're so simple but they just work so well. And that picture... mmph. The things I would do to that man. Anyways, onto the story itself. (I read as I review, in case you didn't know.)

I love how you took the time to actually develop their characters instead of leaping right into the sex. I'm, personally, a fan of porn with a little bit of plot. I've seen too many sex stories where there aren't real characters but this is an exception. I did notice one small grammar mistake; "Your just starting to age." That should be you're. Common mistake. (:

Oh, how I wish I could wear that pea coat... just thought I would mention that. Those coats are amazing.

She looked up, her saffire eyes burning into his blue orbs. That should be sapphire, I believe. -is nitpicky, facepalm- There were a few other mistakes that I noticed later on in the sex scene itself but I didn't want to point out every single one; they were mainly spelling mistakes. The sex itself was well-written, although I couldn't help but think that it must have been a tight squeeze on the floor of the janitor's closet. The idea for this story was really unique and I quite enjoyed it! Now I'm going to go read something else of yours. :D

WOW!

I loved this one shot. Their needs to be more norman reedus stories =)