Lost. - Comments

This was a super interesting story! I really enjoyed your voice in this, it's a writing style I don't often see and thought was well done for the most part. I would just take some time to thoroughly edit so that grammatical or punctuation errors don't take away from the story. Keep writing! Great job!

I can't wait for an update :)

UPDATE!!!! PLEASE !!!!

:) Awesome I love how he keeps telling her to watch her language... she needs to be all bitch please nobody tells me what to do bc he is so used to bossing people around

Dude I love it! Its kind of cheesy but still I like it. Don't wait for three coments okay?! Oh and you better re-read because ther are tiny errors once in a while k? Love it!

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Okay, so the layout obviously doesn't make a story, but it's always appealing to the readers to have a nice layout that fits the story, it's eye-catching and it gets the attention of readers.
I read the chapter 3, because I usually read randoms on comment swap and, well, you do have a nice writing style, you don't make mistakes and it's a pretty fluid style, so kudos for that. However, I don't really feel the plotline, it's not my thing at all and it seems like it's based off of Paramore's songs. I hold no grudges against any band, but I have to say that fictions with songs in them inspired by song, or overall fanfiction... I just... I just can't. But keep writing what you like, of course you can't please everyone in terms of plot. Good luck!

(Comment Swap) first of, line 3 is incomplete, since the text after the comma is missing.
Furhtermore, cut out the annoying scream about what's what. no single word can be stolen, they don't belong to you, or anyone. You know it. quite whining, please!
(Chapter 1)
"My –used-to-be-brown- but- I- dyed- it- blond- and- colorful- like- Avril- Lavigne- hair" require no spaces? particularly, since the previous expression in the same style did not!
Not really anything to steal in that run down stinking hell-whole?
or is it the description of how run down this estate is?
Some nice conversation, this dialogue.
including the speakers identity.
Loads of nice narrative.
I'd suggest that you change '"Plus" in the narrative, into something leass chatty? maybe something more in character with the story?
Try to live up to the last line of the chapter?
"This is a new life we're starting, so we better start it off right! " I'm sure this could go far, just not how far.

Since I red the first chapter, I can't say if there is, or should be more chapters.

Guess the vocabulary goes well with this estate, and the state in which it is in?

:) I really hope he can read her mind like Hunter can read Massie's. "The sexiness" great nickname :)

I sooo cannot wait i loved reading this one it gives some more insight into leonora.... cannot wait to see how you save her bc there is no medical way for a human to survive unless its the witchy magic that messed with collin :)
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I love this story. And snared. Update please. And don't kill Leonora!!!

i dont want leonora to get it. i like the twist there with the whole mate thing. :) cant wait to see what she will think of the pack/

i love your story. i am reading your other story as well, snared. i love your characters and their personalities in both. i hope you keep this one, i cant wait to find out what happens next. :)