Fallen Love - Comments

This story is getting really good now :D And I'm actually really happy reading all the other comments saying how good it is also. :-) Keep up the good work, and I'm glad you kept my layout XD I'm still like head over heels in love with the thing. That's the best layout I've made for any story XDDD

This story is pretty interesting and has some good potential from what I have read so far. The mood of it is pretty eery, and I like the layout :) Its very dark and mysterious and edgy, quite like the story itself. I like the characters, though I can't even begin to spell the main characters name *laughs* its very unique and she has a quite but fiesty personality, which I really liked and can somewhat relate to. Its always nice when you can connect to a story. I've been the new girl once before aswell, and I can see why she was so shy and such. Good story from what I read, great potential and very unique :)

ooo I like this story so far :), I'll hvae to come back and read the other chapters but you do need to space out your paragraphs but I love the layout and your descriptions are amazing :) I'm subbing for sure!

Hey guys I really cant see the grammar or spelling mistakes I've done spell check and they come back fine so can some-one mail me and tell me what mistakes I've made as I want to sort it but cant see where they are wrong xx

First of, you are amazing at describing things. Just amazing, I love how you can describe anything. The layout is beautiful, it is very fitting and well made. I love how you wrote little descriptions for each chapter. It's very good.

But, there was grammar errors. The paragraphs really do need to be spaced, and maybe not centered. It's hard to read then it is like that.

Other than that, it is beautiful :)

I'm sooo worried for the mom :(

The story is quite interesting. I think the paragraphs should be spaced out a little more, it would make it much easier to read. I really like the colors of the layout. It's very pretty.
So far it's good, keep writing. (:

OK so the whole thing with her mum reminds me of when my mum went to hospital. (cancer, not a victum of abuse). There were littererally tubes coming out of everywhere from her (mouth, nose, ect) and there were like 5 machines in the small room. We had to wear a giant plastic bag thing, gloves and those mask things that doctors wear just to get in and hold her hand.

Now, I seriously hate hospitals.

Yayayayay you finally updated!! That was a really good chap and I'm really scared for the mom!! I'm gonna go check out your other story now

Haha now it makes sense..the whole inspector thing! G-d I'm kind of hating him....

OMG! poor rhinaed -dunno hiw to spell it- that was such a great chapter, well dis rioted :) I can't believe the inspector treated her like that... Hope there is more! And thanks for putting me at the end of one of your chapters

Mk so I was really scared..like omg the dad came back with a KNIFE...I hope there is an explanation on why the police were such jerks cause if that were real life they should be fired!

First I gotta say
I love your layout <3

When reading this story
I noticed how well your descriptions are
You are a very nice writer
I can't wait to see how this story ends

Keep up the good work
[PS: I'm gonna subscribe] <3

Omg it's getting really scary update soon I wanna know what happens

The layouts fantasic! Its very interesting making me want to read more and more. Great work. :)

Ooh. very nice story :) Loving the characters and layouts!

Yayayayay you're getting more comments!!! I like both those new chapters! I also like the layout. I like how we get into her personal life because she tells Shermar (I'm sorry if I spelled the name wrong :( )

That is amazing! I hope there is more to it! I don't want it to end there... Please keep writing, that is so much better than my story, I was glued to this story! Please please please write more!

Whew I'm glad you talked about her old life..I was starting to think she was slightly souless for not missing her old home...especially in in the last chap when that letter came! It's really good I don't know why there aren't any more comments.....
anyway i don't want to be obnoxious but you should check out my poems/lyrics (not the first one, the first one is a joke)

There is a lot of good description in this story and I was surprise on how huge the chapter was. Sorry but I also had to put the layout as default, I thought it was a bit too big and compact in that area. The second paragraph also looked too big on the page. Maybe breaking it up a bit as the girl waited for her mother. All I suggest is try and make a better layout then that. If you want I could make one for you, or if you want I could suggest some websites where you could get pictures for banners and background reptative images from.