Swallowed Up - Comments

I really like this. It reveals the truth about people who wear a mask. It made me think of a few people I know. And I could completely relate to this. Good job, so much emotion in so little words. I also liked the layout.

I like the way you wrote it. I felt like it was personal and I got to see another side of the world and see the hidden mask that people wear and see and how yeah at times it is like that when we laugh but it hurt mores. I liked this drabble.

Amaizing. Simply fantastic :) It reminds me of a few people I know. It also reminds me of myself last year. Thank you for putting all this down and doing it in a unique way!

Amaizing. Simply fantastic :) It reminds me of a few people I know. It also reminds me of myself last year. Thank you for putting all this down and doing it in a unique way!

I finally came back to stalk your oneshots and drabbles! First off, I adored the layout. It worked really well with the dark colors. The banner was really lovely, too. Your writing still reminds me of poetry, I adore it. Your words are slant rhymed, which is really unique and just so beautiful. The one thing I would say you could work on is your pausing. You had some commas in places that weren’t necessary and it made the flow stagger here and there. Other than that, there was nothing else I could concrit! <3

I do believe my favorite line was this one: I laugh a little harder, dance a little longer, smile a little brighter. I don’t know why, it’s just beautiful. Amazing job.

The way you wrote this reminds me of something out of a Nick Flynn book. The style isn't that similar, but it does remind me of it.

The short, choppiness of it I think helps the tone of the writing. (At least, I read it choppy.)
Great piece.(:

aw. Almost made me cry a little, because of the truth in it.