Can You Take the Blood? - Comments

Um...that was interesting. When I put in my preferences for the comment swap this I expected. To stray from being bias, I'd like to say this was very well written! The first chapter creeped me out, but I was interested to keep reading despite the possible skinning of another human being. One thing I would like to see happen as the story develops, is a name. To the main character. This isn't so much as a criticism, but more of a curious suggestion. Anyways, that's about it! Keep up the good writing.

@ boyking
Oh goodness, thank you so, so much for your marvelous comment! It really made my day dude! =] and I'm so sorry that it's taken me about a month to get back to you. If I end up in a fucked up enough mood I'll have to post another chapter in your honor. Thank you so much for taking your time to read it and for taking the time and effort to comment as well, I really appreciate that you gave some feedback. Thank you again!

damn. you definitely know how to draw in readers. that first chapter was so fucking intense with just the right amount if detail that i basically had to keep reading. i've never found a "crime" story here on mibba that i genuinely liked but i think this looks interesting and i want to see where you go with it. overall i couldnt find any kind of mistakes, and i'm definitely subscribing!

I thought this was really interesting. The first sentence drew me in because it's something unxpected. I've never read anything on Mibba where murder is described as a chore.

The description was really good, very vivid and you're obviously very talented at describing the gory details, it's brilliant so well done :)

Whoa, just the first sentence got me like O.O
Totally unprepared for it to be compared to a chore. Seriously though, have you murdered someone? This is scary good. It's really beautifully written though. I like that the detective finds this to be sort of beautiful and artistic. It shows that some people are really twisted even if they don't seem like it. Good job (:

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Well, you are -- excuse me, ONE FUCKED UP MOTHERFUCKER. And I think I've fallen in love with you. Oh god, your sense of disgusting description was calling to me, singing to my mind and chilling my blood. Oh, god. It was just a beautiful read. I think this is your calling, you're beautiful and amazing. Holy shit. I need to go back and read it again, just so I can picture this disgusting exchange once more. <3 Carry on, my twisted, awe-inspiring, disgusting, horrible, beautiful writer. I will be checking in again.

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I agree with the person below me. This is very, very descriptive. The descriptions contribute greatly to the dark, semi-disturbing mood of the story. It definetly puts me in a place where I can imagine the scene before me, further greatening the descriptive quality. It's actually very good.
Continue writing !(:

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Hiya:) I have to say that this is one of the most detailed stories that I have ever read!! And at some parts it did make me feel just a but weirded out. Although, this was such a great piece of writing! :)

I liked how you used something as cheery as Christmas decorations and turned it into something twisted. The imagery you made with the arteries and veins and heart made it just perfect for me imagine.

The character themselves added a mysterious aura that had me thinking what kind of person they are. Also, adding the cops made me think of a crime investigation show ( which I completely love)!

Overall, I think this an amazing story that has a lot of potential! :)

I'm just going to start off by saying holy crap this made me feel uncomfortable. But in a good way! I agree with Ned Flanders about it being a masterpiece, though.

You have a very keen eye for detail. For me, the line that really got me to feel sick and uncomfortable, was in the third paragraph.

Never had I witnessed a scene full of so much blood that the walls, floor, furniture, ceiling even, was entirely drenched in the essence of only one being's life fluid.

I think it was the use of fluid in terms of a human that made me feel sick but I'm not sure. Either way, that line was really intense and everything about that - the person being skinned, the eyes oh my god - made me feel pretty ill. Phew I wish that I had read this before I ate my breakfast! xD

You are very talented in writing. You should write a horror novel and be the next Stephen King, because from this, I can tell that you would be really good at it.

Thank you for putting up your writing for others to read. It truly was gruesomely horrifying (in the best possible way!) (:

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Holy shit, that made my stomach hurt! This is a gruesome masterpiece, truly. I was unfortunately able to imagine every single detail, and I say unfortunately because I just ate a sandwich and now I feel like it's coming out. Damn, you're on fire! I love how you describe everything as if you truly were a psycho, like how the scenario looked like Christmas decorations. Oh man, that is just... sick and twisted and... It's like Criminal Minds on acid! You're too good at this, are you sure you're not some sort of psychopathic killer? Yeah, I'll just run away now O_O

Dang!!! You said i was a good writer! Your amazing! I loved this

The discription and eeriness of this gave me the shivers xDD
I really like it and how nothing is really, revealed or anything.