Just Go Ask Lilly - Comments

comments would be kindly appriciated!
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The layout hurt my eyes so I had to change it to default.

By the way, you might want to check out your grammar a bit. Just before you post. Or "hire" a user on Mibba to check it for you.

I like the idea, though. And the title really pulled me in.

Check out the charecter's if you wanna see how they look!
And comment's would be greatly welcomed!
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Hey like it all these other loser can back off and do you want to go dress shopping with Terrie.

This is really hard to read. I like the idea--I've actually written something similar to it before. But the layout is harsh on the eyes and very bland. Your link is the same color as the background, so you can't even see where it says "Chapter 1." The content is also difficult to read. You use little proper punctuation and you often make typos (or are these spelling errors?). If you don't already, go through your writing and edit the grammar before you post it. I can guarantee that more people will read your stuff, if it's easier to read. I'm sorry this is long. These are just suggestions though, so you don't have to take me seriously. (:

Me and the rest of my sister's has nothing in common.

Its "My sisters and I have nothing in common."
Just a few errors, nothing some editing can't fix :)
Overall I like the layout and the story itself xD
Update soon! :) <33