August 27th, 2011 at 12:53am
We’re fumbling around messily until I’m inside of him, caressing him, touching him until he’s arched off the duvet and into me, coming messily against me, the warm splash of his semen on my chest and torso. And I’m coming inside of him, shaking, gasping, spilling inside of his warm insides; I want to make him feel.
Okay, so in my opinion, that right there is the best effing sex scene i've ever read, because....seriously i have no clue. it just made me smile and go 'awe.' honestly, that was my favorite part or practically any story i've ever read, not gonna lie.
that was amazing.
Right off the bat, I adored the dialogue between your characters. It seemed so real and organic and it flowed so nicely; it was the furthest thing from forced. Also, your description of James really made him sound like the cutest thing in the world. :)
Throughout the entire piece, I loved just how freaking stubborn Devin was; it was cute and quite realistic! You did a great job developing both of these characters. :) That ending was so sweet as well! I think you did a great job with making this cute and, yes a little cheesy, but very realistic at the same time! Thanks so much for entering it in my contest!