Don't Respect the Words You're Speaking - Comments

Hello! Comment swap, here!
I don't really know much about Avenge Sevenfold, so maybe that is why I got a little confused by all of the characters being thrown in at the beginning, so it might just be me. I think if you added more of a description about each character before they were mentioned it would help ease them in rather than feel like the reader is being thrown into the story. It was semi difficult for me to follow at the beginning, but I caught up. I also found a couple grammatical errors (missing commas, misspells) so I would also recommend re-reading your work!
I only read the first two chapters and I don't get the average "baby mama drama" feel you were worried about, I think you're taking this a unique route and I praise you for that, a lot! I think you have good dialogue as well. I think you need more description though because I would like to know what Silver is thinking in her head, rather than she just vocalizes what she is feeling. It'll make the story seem more intimate.
Other than that I really like what you have done and I might just keep reading to see what is in store! Good job!!

Great story! I can't wait to you update!!

I say do a 2 parter. For the simple reason that, one might be too much of a run on. Plus, You get to leave us dangling and chomping at the bit for the end. Maybe I'm just screwy in the head, but I think it would make more sense.

UPDATESIES!!! NOOW!! Pleaaaaasseee!! :D

Finally! I'm so happy they're back together!

Uuuh I'm so excited what happens at the music video shoot :D keep updating it in this short periods of time :D

Neeew update please ASAP!!

This story is soo cool! Please update it soon :)

@ frankie_a7x
thanks :)

yay she moved in with him!! And that little scene with Oli at the preschool made me cry! It was soooo cute!

she should totally move in with him!!!

I love this story soo much you have to update while I subscribe!

lol thank you all and i've been trying to update every night. but i usually jinxs my self so lets see lol but so far im loving it.

who is it???brian?matt?johnny??omg....update as soon as u can right?!!!!!XD

I like this :)

I really LOVE this story I cant wait to see what happens next so update SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!