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  • Jon Toews

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    Jesus, woman. Friggen update already... :)
    how nice of you to comment kind stranger. I will try:)
    October 21st, 2012 at 03:09pm
  • Multi Colored Ranger

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    Jesus, woman. Friggen update already... :)
    October 21st, 2012 at 07:29am
  • aLittlePotatoFish

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    I'm not a sports fan, so I don't have a lot to comment on your writing. It seems as good as can be to me. Something I would definitely change is your author's note. Don't go through a story with proper capitalization, punctuation, and grammar, then forget every rule of writing when you go to write your author's note. Continue to use capitalization, punctuation, and grammar, even when you're not writing a story. Also, you can't necessarily say "All Rights Reserved" when you have absolutely no right to a person who already exists and is not under your control. Your layout as well is confusing and distracting. Try putting the image as a title background, instead of in the page background. That way the image stays at the top as you scroll down, but still scrolls with the story. It is too distracting to be in the middle of a story and only half an image in the background.
    June 6th, 2012 at 10:05pm
  • Sparxx

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    Love this story it's amazing!!! Please continue it, there r not a lot of Tyler stories out there and this 1 is awesome!!!
    January 13th, 2012 at 08:25am
  • lappyandhiggy

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    MORE MORE MORE :)
    August 18th, 2011 at 01:17am
  • Samc123

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    OH my GOD. I LOVE IT! (even the greys anatomy part) its like you stole my entire dreams and put it into a story!!! PLEAASE KEEP WRITITING!
    August 17th, 2011 at 01:15am
  • chelseadaggerr

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    UPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATEUPDATE
    August 8th, 2011 at 06:27pm
  • Multi Colored Ranger

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    Ohmygod. This is very nice. ;) Tyler is too adorable<3 And that pps about Nathan Horton = 100% TRUE.
    August 1st, 2011 at 02:37pm
  • RosiePosie08

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    Love this and would love to be bergy's girl. Please!
    July 31st, 2011 at 10:37am
  • chelseadaggerr

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    dddammmmnn gurrll! I was SO PUMPED when I saw your comment that you updated, you totally didn't disappoint!! I am muy intrigued by this little secreto from the past. FOREVER HATING NIGEL AND WHAT A GREY'S COCKBLOCK HE IS!

    I NEED MORE! Please update every second of every day and never stop. Thanks.
    July 31st, 2011 at 05:40am
  • chelseadaggerr

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    PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I NEED THIS STORY
    July 27th, 2011 at 12:52am
  • Multi Colored Ranger

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    Um, hi. I love Tyler. I love this story. I love you. And the Bruins are going to win the cup tomorrow. Bye.
    June 15th, 2011 at 04:01am
  • lauren;

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    i just found this and i'm already in love.
    and i'm a vancouver fan so i hope you don't hate me ahhaahhahahaa.
    June 14th, 2011 at 05:16pm
  • jenwash

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    I'm really excited to see where this goes! Great story line!
    June 12th, 2011 at 07:50pm
  • RosiePosie08

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    Love this story.
    June 12th, 2011 at 05:28am
  • emmared FMT!

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    I need me a good Sega story <3 update soon girl!
    June 4th, 2011 at 04:04am
  • RosiePosie08

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    Love this. Update soon honey
    May 24th, 2011 at 09:00pm
  • love bites71

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    ppplleeeeaaasseee update soon!!!!!!!!
    so good. love it. (:
    May 23rd, 2011 at 04:52am
  • Multi Colored Ranger

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    Shit. Can he just get his ass into my bed right now?
    lkfdlsdkfjs.
    Thanks for distracting me from my geometry project. Now there's no way I'm going to ever finish this.
    Okay. This is my favorite story. Ever.
    May 23rd, 2011 at 04:49am
  • Leslie.

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    lmgogsmomgsdomgsdomgmdsuiahsilsngfakfs
    this is beautiful ok.
    May 22nd, 2011 at 02:50am
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