June 2nd, 2011 at 03:21pm
Firstly, thank you for joining my contest and picking a band that I know (too much) about.
The layout I like, it’s nice and simple which is nice. No blinding colours, no tiny text, no glowing text either. I don’t know quite what I expected when I first saw at the picture at the top, but I wasn’t disappointed.
Now for the bits I liked the most.
“My darling is important! She’s got hole in her bass!” he yells, pushing. “Lemme go, John!”
It’s sad but I can actually imagine him saying that, which is good, you’ve hit the Ben right on the head when it comes to his character.
I can just imagine that puppy-dog face he’s giving the rest of the band. Thank God I can’t see it, otherwise I’d put him down and leave him be if I saw it.
Put him down as in when you put a dog down? Ah well, I liked that bit anyway. I love in general that John doesn’t see Ben as some perfect/flawless person, but embraces his minor flaws.
We’re going to have tea and I’m going to ask him. I know it’s completely lame and everyone does it. I know it’s cliché, but it’s Ben, you know?
Although it maybe cliché, I have yet to read a story where two people go out for tea and have a lovely little relationship talk.
He stands up straight again, and looks across, watching the sun. I smile and pull him into my side. He leans towards me and I kiss the side of his head. We stand there for a while until I take his hand in my gently.
Perfect moment in words, right there.
“You haven’t asked me properly.” He teases.
Ben doesn’t make anything remotely easy for John, does he?
If they truly love you as much as you love them, a simple, I love you is all they need to know.
That quite sums up this whole story. Love.
There weren’t any major grammer/spelling mistakes that I could find, so that was good.
On another note, I’m glad you made this Ben/John. Ben is such a good match with John, I think you made the wise decision not to do Gustav/John (mainly because Gustav’s to skinny assed to give proper cuddles, which, is key in this story.)
It’s also nice that this is different from your other pieces, if not, better.
Picture <3
Good luck.
Ali.
I love this!
And i just put a heart next to God...
Aww wells xD
BEN! :D I love that guy
He's just awesome
When we saw YG i was semi-annoyed cause i'm really short and was all 'Waa me wanna see Ben' lol I couldn't though...I'm a midget
I love all the guys actually.
Their blog video things are amazing and so are they hehe
And now i'm just talking about the band instead of the story... Oops
I never thought about Ben and John before xD
And where did you find that frigging picture? haha Love it
I always think of Ben and Simon....not 100% sure why though :3
And....When i was reading this...For some reason, i kept thinking of one of their videos (not one that related to the story at all though...)
You know the one where they're like 'We didn't crash into the bus... It hit us... But as we pulled out...We hit the bus' Something like that :P
The bit at the start made me smile :) I could imagine that happening lol