January 13th, 2013 at 09:28pm
Hey Mr. Carter - Comments
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I hate you for killing Wayne.</3 I died a little.January 13th, 2013 at 07:45am
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@ Markila
Thank you so much :)September 15th, 2012 at 04:36pm -
This story made me cry at the end. You are such a good writer.July 26th, 2012 at 08:41pm
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Haha thanks :)
-MaiaJuly 27th, 2011 at 11:51pm -
omg the ending is SO sad but SO good! bravo I love it!! *claps hands*July 27th, 2011 at 04:49am
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Don't worry I have a new fanfiction coming up straight after I finish this one :)
-MaiaJuly 1st, 2011 at 06:26pm -
Noooo. don't end it! o:
- And no it isn't the same without Wayne.June 30th, 2011 at 11:47pm -
Thank you very much :)
-MaiaJune 28th, 2011 at 06:37pm -
I love this story sooo much update soonJune 25th, 2011 at 01:02am
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haha you'll have to wait till thursday :)June 22nd, 2011 at 12:51am
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Uh. Who is it - who is it ;)
- Update soon! :DJune 21st, 2011 at 07:35pm -
With the tour Wayne was planning it before him and tia went out so thats why it wasn't mentioned :)
Thanks! :)
-MaiaJune 14th, 2011 at 11:44pm -
Thanks for allowing me to review this (and I say this so you don't feel as if I'm overstepping the invite to do so.)
Drops- Tours don't just come out of the blue; rappers plan them and know before time. It seemed that it came offhandedly in the story.; The spacing is a little weird.
Props - keeping the pregnancy a secret thickens the plot. :)June 14th, 2011 at 11:19pm -
Thank you so much! Your comments have been so helpful because I am writing my second Lil Wayne fanfiction at the moment and your advice has been very helpful. Like I said above this was the first fanfiction I had ever written and I was really taking notes from other Lil Wayne fanfictions that I read and even I think looking back it went wayyyyy too fast, luckily Mrs. Officer (I'll leave that title to play on your mind) is taking things much slower and has more characters and is genuinely better with length and dialogue e.t.c. because I've learnt a lot from writing Hey Mr. Carter.
Oh and when you said about the sex scenes, the reason why I don't go into a lot of detail is because my guy friend reads my fanfiction and he was only reading it because he heard there was gonna be erotic scenes in it, when he found out and became very interested I deleted them all.
Once again thanks for the advice and for not being a silent reader! I love people who give me their opinions on what I write because it helps a lot :)
-MaiaJune 13th, 2011 at 11:28pm -
Last thing, I felt that there should have been more dialogue when Wayne appeared at Tia's apartment after apologizing.
Now, I'm sorry that my comments may have been seen as a little harsh, but I'll give you your props:
*the girl being paid by Trina to ruin the relationship = GENIUS!
*Lisa interfering to save Wayne and Tia's relationship
*Wayne's manager questioning Wayne and Tia's relationship and testing him
*Use of Twitter = a little out of the ordinary, but fit the context of the story.
*Nicki Minaj, 'nuff said
*Tia's response to the pregnancy = REAL!
*Wayne's decision to marry Tia, especially in front of an audience = PRICELESS!June 13th, 2011 at 09:13pm -
Stopped again. YOU SAID SHE WASN'T GONNA BE LIKE THE OTHERS! After two days and a date, they've already done the dirty. Suggestion time again!
Suggestion: When you want two characters to have sex, but you want to hold it off for a few chapters, write a teaser (a scene that's kept PG, with no sex and draws the line at fondling). Have something interrupt them before they go too far. In the end, you save your character's virginity, and keep your readers in suspense! :)
Back to reading!June 13th, 2011 at 08:56pm -
Hey, kinda just stopped mid-way through the story, but I noticed someone pointed out that things were moving kind of fast between Tia and Wayne. Just a suggestion for future writing: When you want things to move kind of fast between characters, use a time lapse such as "Weeks passed" or "Days passed".
Now, I shall get back to reading! ;)June 13th, 2011 at 08:48pm -
Thanks! :)
-MaiaJune 5th, 2011 at 07:56pm -
that was relle good keep the chapters comingJune 5th, 2011 at 04:55am
Sorry about that but not every story can have a happy ending. Thanks for reviewing though! It's great to hear different opinions on the ending .
-Maia