Hey Mr. Carter - Comments

@ Darkest Hour
Sorry about that but not every story can have a happy ending. Thanks for reviewing though! It's great to hear different opinions on the ending .

-Maia

I hate you for killing Wayne.</3 I died a little.

@ Markila
Thank you so much :)

This story made me cry at the end. You are such a good writer.

Haha thanks :)

-Maia

omg the ending is SO sad but SO good! bravo I love it!! *claps hands*

Don't worry I have a new fanfiction coming up straight after I finish this one :)

-Maia

Noooo. don't end it! o:

- And no it isn't the same without Wayne.

Thank you very much :)

-Maia

I love this story sooo much update soon

haha you'll have to wait till thursday :)

Uh. Who is it - who is it ;)
- Update soon! :D

With the tour Wayne was planning it before him and tia went out so thats why it wasn't mentioned :)
Thanks! :)

-Maia

Thanks for allowing me to review this (and I say this so you don't feel as if I'm overstepping the invite to do so.)

Drops- Tours don't just come out of the blue; rappers plan them and know before time. It seemed that it came offhandedly in the story.; The spacing is a little weird.
Props - keeping the pregnancy a secret thickens the plot. :)

Thank you so much! Your comments have been so helpful because I am writing my second Lil Wayne fanfiction at the moment and your advice has been very helpful. Like I said above this was the first fanfiction I had ever written and I was really taking notes from other Lil Wayne fanfictions that I read and even I think looking back it went wayyyyy too fast, luckily Mrs. Officer (I'll leave that title to play on your mind) is taking things much slower and has more characters and is genuinely better with length and dialogue e.t.c. because I've learnt a lot from writing Hey Mr. Carter.

Oh and when you said about the sex scenes, the reason why I don't go into a lot of detail is because my guy friend reads my fanfiction and he was only reading it because he heard there was gonna be erotic scenes in it, when he found out and became very interested I deleted them all.

Once again thanks for the advice and for not being a silent reader! I love people who give me their opinions on what I write because it helps a lot :)

-Maia

Last thing, I felt that there should have been more dialogue when Wayne appeared at Tia's apartment after apologizing.

Now, I'm sorry that my comments may have been seen as a little harsh, but I'll give you your props:

*the girl being paid by Trina to ruin the relationship = GENIUS!
*Lisa interfering to save Wayne and Tia's relationship
*Wayne's manager questioning Wayne and Tia's relationship and testing him
*Use of Twitter = a little out of the ordinary, but fit the context of the story.
*Nicki Minaj, 'nuff said
*Tia's response to the pregnancy = REAL!
*Wayne's decision to marry Tia, especially in front of an audience = PRICELESS!

Stopped again. YOU SAID SHE WASN'T GONNA BE LIKE THE OTHERS! After two days and a date, they've already done the dirty. Suggestion time again!

Suggestion: When you want two characters to have sex, but you want to hold it off for a few chapters, write a teaser (a scene that's kept PG, with no sex and draws the line at fondling). Have something interrupt them before they go too far. In the end, you save your character's virginity, and keep your readers in suspense! :)

Back to reading!

Hey, kinda just stopped mid-way through the story, but I noticed someone pointed out that things were moving kind of fast between Tia and Wayne. Just a suggestion for future writing: When you want things to move kind of fast between characters, use a time lapse such as "Weeks passed" or "Days passed".

Now, I shall get back to reading! ;)

Thanks! :)

-Maia

that was relle good keep the chapters coming