Shattered Dreams - Comments

Wait, was this the only entry? Or the winner?

Damn, I did not see that coming. But, I suppose it's for the best for a one shot. It leaves no where else to go, otherwise I'd end up wanting more, haha. Adorable story. I loved the dialogue. It made me laugh on numerous occasions. James was so sweet, and over all, I'm just glad there's even one James McAvoy story on here, even if it's just a one shot. :( haha. But, I love you for it!

You're loved by,
-Kate

Shocking ending! The story itself, the actual plot, was great! I adored the way she met and how she was scared to get involved and blamed it on the distance, but really it was that she was sick and knew she didn't have much time. I liked that he cared enough to really chase after her. I also loved that she was an American writer. I just really dig that for some reason. Over all, the plot was absolutely adorable and so much fun to read!

The grammar could use a lot of work. The punctuation was quite off and the paragraph spacing needs to be fixed, so that was a jam reading it. It kind of put a damper on it for me.

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