Look Past The Mirror's Glass - Comments

the title's amazing!!!
love the banner too XD
the split personality thing was really good,it's th first time i've seen this :D
love the story so much!!
i'm gonna subscribe :D

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I like the banner. It looks nice and mysterious.

Tracy looked like an ordinary attractive 18 year old girl could ever be – this sounds a little off. Maybe reword it a bit? And to be technical, there should also be a comma after “ordinary” and there should be hyphens for the age like “18-year-old.” I also think you should read this about using the word “though.” I hope it helps. Aside from that, I really like the summary. It’s intriguing without giving too much away, just the way a summary should be.

Personally, I thought the pacing of this was a little too fast. But I think the concept of the story is quite good. :)

I loved the title, very original and the layout is nice and simple :D
I love the whole split personality thing that you've got going on there, well done.
:D

I must say that I am liking this so far. like eyes closed; said, I love how you went about the split personality part. I just love your writing as a whole, because you know how to draw the reader in :)

For some critisim, or at least I hope you don't mind some :) In the beginning of your story it was a bit slow for me. I get what you were trying to do, trust me I do, because I have been there, but for me, there was just a little too much detail. I hope you understand what I mean. Like you described their laughs like three different times and that she randomly had the hiccups or little things like that. Sometimes less is more :)

Then there was the Than vs. Then. Sometimes you had those two mixed up, again, nothing major, but maybe just some editing? pasted= passed :) When you said that she was passed out in the bedroom, or when Matt said thinking naughty things, it should be passed :)

Either way, I absolutely love the layout, it works well and I just love this story and want to see where it goes :) Keep up the amazing work though!! <3

Woah now girl! That was... hahahaha... I don't even know how to explain it. It seems as if Matt's going to be in for a very long and confusing ride :)

I totally get your story, and I'm loving the entire split personality thing. You were genius when you made Lacy know that Tracy exists, and yet not the other way around.

:)