I love this and will be subbing. It seems an ok length but I couldn't imagine it being shorter lol I'm glad you added stuff to it. I find the bright pink a little eye drawing but it still works and is still readable. It''s definitely not like a lay out I've seen before.
As for the rest I'm subbing =] I also want to comment on the intro I like how it from the jump took you away in to the story. And your description is spot on. I hope you update soon.