Beautiful Demise - Comments

Dont stop writing. This story is awesome and i want to know what happens!!!

This time I'll start with the

Fav Parts:

"Opening her mouth she seemed to inhale the gold shimmering light left in the dark endless void and bellowed out the first notes of her heart's song. She filled with it the memory of Angelick and the love and passion she had felt for the small child letting it fill her soul. Even if the sound was filled with pain and longing. Even if the sound seemed godly and unreal as well as just plain inhuman, it was her sound. It was her voice filling that awful hole in her heart and repairing the tear of her soul. It was her voice that caused Itatchi to lose his grip on her mind and release her from the alternate reality. No one had ever done that."

""I'm so unsure. I just hope that im right when I feel that your soul is untainted by the darkness even when imprisoned by it." Behairavi whispered before it was she who turned her back to him and retreated to the hard matress in the corner. She heard the door slowly creak shut and the lock click in place and bit her lip hard as the darkness engulfed her." SO cheesy but so beautiful lol xD

"Itatchi crept down the corridor deep in thought. It was wrong. He knew it was wrong. Those wild golden eyes haunted him as he stalked down the corridor. She was right though. They both were prisoners. After all prisoners hated their situations didn't they? What better emotion to describe his? Hate, a perfect word. Only the look on the girl's face was not of hatred. He suddenly doubted the girl could ever hate anything. Which led him back to the thought that imprisoning her was wrong. Very wrong." Awwww, so much self-loathing lol, I like it xD AGAIN, cheesyness on the innosence part, but whatever xD

"Sadly enough, Itatchi never thought of Bhairavi's name. He never cared to ask. No one had. she wasn't human to them. She wasn't a person. It was easier for Itatchi that way. It might have crossed his mind to ask at one point, but he dismissed it immediately, even if he was truely a good person who just had a bad fate dealt to him, he knew that knowing her name would be the final shove he needed to go against his plans and free the girl he knew needed to be freed. At that moment, Bhairavi wasn't a person to him either"

OKAY, OKAY, I'LL JUST LEAVE IT AT THIS!This chapter is seriously filled with too many beautiful lines for me to copy paste here -.-' I can honestly say this is the best of all the chaps you've written so far for this story T^TKeep writing!

I really can't understand where the hell did you the idea you're incapable of creating an evil aura around your characters from -,-' THIS.CHAP.FREAKING.ROCKED.
I can only give up writing AGAIN after reading this lol.
AND my fav part was this: "The door swun open revealing a darkly lit room where even the shadows seemed to be alive and seemed to reach out to the intruders desperately trying to latch onto their cloaks and weasel themselves inside your soal carressing it and trying to taint it with its putrid hate and malice."
So.beautiful.T^T
I also loved the part where she starts wailing for the dead man and the weather and forest change as if mourning along with her.Can't wait for what's next!

You're so cruel lol,I read your message just a minute before I left my house to go take my geometry exam,and I freaking couldn't go read the new chap! T^T
Turns out it was worth the waiting though!OOOH the appearence of Kakazu and Hidan, very exciting, especially when they decided to take her and leave.I absolutely adored the part when they first saw her and she was staring at nothing with dead eyes,it was so creepy yet poetic,and afterwards when she sang for them and kakazu thought that he was almost close to actually feeling, I MELTED LOL!
And of course the ending was SO COOL =D

WOW WOW WOW,hold on a sec: i'm about to freaking cry you stupid writer T^T
This.was.simply.magical.Seriously, I can tell this story's going to be AWESOME from the start,it has this enchanting atmosphere,with the enslaved girl whose voice makes the whole world pause and listen,the firefly thing,the Cherokee (sorry if I spelled that wrong)tribe etc!
I'M SO EFFING EXCITED!And depressed,but oh well.I feel like a worthless writer,and I feel like deleting my stories and go die or something.So yeah,fantastic job T^T