Where is the story set? Is Alixanderia in highschool or college? What grade? Describe the classroom and what Mr. Matthews sounded and looked like. It is a pretty good beginning to the story. :)
December 5th, 2018 at 11:33pm
I found the introduction good. It has/had a hook to it. Since it’s been a good seven years, I’m going to guess this won’t be picked up again? I love the banner, it fit perfectly together for your summary. I’ll admit that I don’t know who this band is, but the introduction to your summary was very well done and if I had randomly come up on it randomly and not comment swap, I would have clicked to read as it’s a very relatable subject and presented with just enough detail without giving away the whole plot, which is very important. The layout is easy to read and I like the black and red font, not too bright.
Alright chapter one: It was a quick read of 500+ words, but I really liked the set up. Beginning with the ending (the wedding) and starting from the beginning. Those are always fun to read because you know the ending before the beginning and it’s a normally challenging way of writing, but the emotions were there and there was detail without overusing detail. It had a perfectly good balance for the prologue, which is usually the point of a prologue. To give the readers enough introduction to want to read more.
Chapter one gave the beginning to a great setup. I personally think you should keep going, but just the same, great job! I hope you decide to finish it one of these days.
