Perfect Christmas - Comments

it was kind of boring and unoriginal to me sorry.

"You've Already Written It!" Prewrite Contest:

Layout: I liked the picture, but I didn't like how you had it repeating down the side with the blue font. It was a little hard to read.

Content: The story was sweet and nice, but there was no real problem or character development. The second chapter was hard to read since it was the same thing that happened in chapter one but in Mia's POV, except for the ending. I liked the idea of the same thing in 2 POVs, but in this case it didn't really work.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: There were errors, mostly in chapter one. There is a ' between Im, for one. There were some other mistakes too, but none to take away from the story completely.

Overall: This was cute =)

This was definitely very cute. :) I enjoyed it very much.

Layout:
I have to admit, the layout is pretty bland, and while it does fit with the story, I wish it would've been a little nicer.

Grammar & spelling:
There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but not too distracting or anything. Overall, good job with that. :)

Content:
This was a very cute little one-shot, but I did find myself not really feeling much of anything for the characters. The development of the characters was almost nonexistent, really, and I didn't much care for Mia (she seemed more demanding and expectant than anything else). I did enjoy the story, though. :) Keep up the good work.