So sorry I haven't been keeping up, JV. I feel like an awful panda. >.< Anyways.. Great updates! :D Now they get to venture into the creepy asylum! YAY! Yep, this is how I want my first date to be. xD
And Avenged is, indeed, a pretty cool band. ;) She's hanging out with the guitarist, and she doesn't even know it. I wonder what Ember would say if she found out who Fenix was hanging out with. Hmm, intriguing.. Now Joh demands an update!! :D
So, now Zacky has an idea? Is that a good thing? Sorry ZV...you always have great ides :D. You're honestly making me fall in love with young Zacky, stop it JV!
I love how caring he is toward Fenix, even though he's only just met her. But he's just so sweet.
I loved when he caught her and they just looked at each other. They're so going to fall in love :D.
I can see why you liked this chapter :). I loved it.
That wasn't too cute. None of it. It was perfect. The emotions. The everything. :D I love how you call the colour of his eyes 'celadon' something different than the usual description.
Hmm Zacky is sexy when he smokes, though smoking is bad for you *naughty Zacky* lol.
There was one typo, you wrote 'him' instead of 'in' when he's goes to help Fenix up on the roof. Otherwise that was very well written :D.
Dear JV, I love you so much. xD "All things put together, he was fucking gorgeous."
Now all we need is a Gates and this story will be amazing! I kid. :3 I seriously love this. You have made me fall in love with your writing skills, and I love the way you talk about Zacky. He sounds so huggable. Like the "previous commenter" I wish to hug him too.
You're writing is definitely improving, I couldn't see any obvious errors :D. The prose flowed extremely well.
I really like the name you used for your main character. Fenix :D. Kinda like Felix and Phoenix combined.
I must admit I laughed when you described the Psych doc as looking like Morgan Freeman :D [He's a great actor and I also laughed when my mu swore that he'd died...>.>].
Hmmmm I wonder who that guy she ran into was...>.>.