i deffently like this story! it develops nicely and you keep the intrest for me in!!
i have a hard time reading stories from start to finish and i was able to keep reading this one till the end!! the only thing i have to critisive is that sometimes the details go on and on and on. though details are great and i am all for have an amazing visual sometimes you end up skipping whole paragraphs of detail but other than that it is an amazing story!!!