I loved the first half, how you mentioned Neomi had read about murder and sympathized with the victims and how being one was scary as shit. To be honest, I don't the the end was the best you could have done. Perhaps more detail into her thoughts would have made it better? If she had any regrets, if she wanted vengeance, if she was worried to die alone? A life left unfinished? This story left me with the creeps though < hopefully that's what you were going for :D
This is really good. I did a murder one-shot for a contest once... It sucked. And for some reason I expected Johnny or Jimmy to be the one in jail, not Syn. Oh well. Good job!
That was amazing! I loved it, you have no idea how much I was smirking. Haha, anyways, the whole thing was amazing, and it was well written. The intro made me soo interested. The picture you used for the banner made me happy, 'cause it fit the story. I never knew Brian was gonna be in jail, that made it more interesting. The way you explained the things was great! From a scale of one to ten, ten being highest, I give ya a ten. Overall it was amazing. There were one or two spelling mistakes, but I'm not counting them. Amazing entry and thanks for entering!