Asylum - Comments

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Woah. This. This!

I've always been a girl for the sick and twisted, and this was right up my alley. I loved the beginning, I loved the way you made your own style of beginning it. It was truly amazing.

I also took a liking to the way you made the character seem genuine. I mean, does anyone mad really believe that they are? Of course not. And, the way you incorporated the reasoning for him to be in the asylum was unique as well.

The layout's nice. It's simple yes complex, and I feel that it fits the story well.

I'm looking forward to another update!

I can't say this was really my cup of tea. The character didn't really seem mad to me; demented to the point of being cartoonist, but realistically, not how I would portray someone who's lost their mind. Your chunky paragraphs are very hard to work through, and I kept losing my place because I was having such a difficult time reading the tiny font you've chosen. It was a very odd story. Not bad, but not something that I particularly enjoyed. We all have our own tastes I guess... I encourage you to keep writing and keep improving.

wow...This is half interesting and half sickening. You really put some thought into what a mad man thinks about. I kind of hope this guy dies. The layout was really cool and your writing style was good as well...continue to write because you have real talent!

I found this quite interesting to write.