All I Wanted - Comments

I really liked the emotion behind this. The way you wrote this makes it easy for the reader to understand the pain of the character. I also liked how realistic it seems, the thought process of the character is easy to follow and makes it really feel like your in their head. There were more than a few spelling and grammar mistakes. I think if you re-read it you should catch a few of them, or even if you get a beta to read through it. None of them were too bad and they shouldn't take too long to fix. Other than that I thought this was great :)

It's tragic!

Sadly this hits home with me, so maybe its why it made me so sad. I don't rally notice spelling errors or anything like that so I'm sorry that I can't help much with that. Its a good thing because it means it wasn't enough for me to notice. I really like this story and how you wrote it is awesome!

I LOVE the layout, the picture is amazing.

I really liked this. I can relate to it and I liked the way you wrote it.
Good job!

This was just too tragic. Just too sad, really. There are a few typos here and there, but meh. It's still a good read. I'd have to admit that the dark layout made it a bit hard for me to read but let's just attribute that to the fact that I'm in a 'colorful' mood right now.

Great work dude!

I thought this was beautiful. Nearly making me cry at some moments. The layout looks lovely and with the picture putting the cherry on top. The use of words you put into that small chapter made the story sound so much better. I enjoyed it to the fullest. :)

That was good. There were some grammer and word placement mistakes that was a bit confusing. Proofreading would fix that right up, though. :)

That aside, it was very good. A nice idea and well executed show of emotions. Your writing style isnt very flower-y (I guess I could put it that way). Kind of straightforward. And I felt that added to the one- shot very nicely.

Please keep up the good work.