Two Birds, One Stone. - Comments

The layout made me smile :D <- See, I'm smiling! Anyway... Love the background! The description of her was good as well, since it bothers me when people lay out all the character is, from their height to their eye color, in detail, in one really long sentence -.-' This looks like it will be really cute :D Kinda like 27 dresses, only the boss was an idiot, not stringing her around like Richard does. I can't wait to see how he reacts when his chew toy is taken away :D The story has a lot of potential *subs*

I love this already. It seems like it's gonna be a really fun story. I love Ashley. Actually, I'm pretty shocked that there are actually good, non-cliche hetero original fic here. Usually, I won't read this kind of story because I don't want to read anything cliche. But I'm glad I read yours and I'll make sure that I won't judge something without giving it a chance.

I love your characters. They look alive. And this is just the first chapter. I can see potential here and I can't wait to know what's gonna happen next. I'm subscribing. ^_^

It looks like you have a fun idea. I love the fact that you have a very simple layout. I would just say that you might want to reread it or have a beta read over it. There was a part or two were I was confused but got things through context. Overall, however, this story seems like it could be very light and fun and that you could have something very interesting. I was afraid for a moment that you were going to have Mark wearing skinny jeans when I saw the word skinny in his clothes description. Gotta say I gave a sigh of relief when he wasn't XD

this is good!

Intriguing. Very nice layout - I enjoyed the background, and the banner picture was eye catching

There were a few grammatical errors - in the last bit, I saw that the word 'idiot' was capitalized in the middle of a sentence, and the word accent was spelled wrong, but other than that I liked it. The characters seem fresh and interesting, and I like what we know of the plot. I'm curious to see where it goes.

I love this so far! And I like your writing style - I've always struggled to write in third person, so go you! :D
I'm honestly really curious to see how this pans out!

First off, I love the layout! I really liked the first chapter, I love how Ashley's attitude changes when she sees Mark. You did a great job with descriptions! I'm definitely going to subscribe! (:

I really enjoyed it. I cant wait til you post up again.

I really enjoyed the first chapter!
The layout really seems to fit with the story, and I liked the way you introduced it enough so that the reader would understand, but didn't overfill it with details and info. Keep up the good work!

This was a very good first chapter, I enjoyed reading it :)

The summary was very good at saying who the main characters are and gives a good idea of what the story is about, without giving everything away.

I love the layout, the background it very cute and I like how it fits in with her involvement in manga.

I liked the descriptions that you used, but I think there are a few places where commas are needed.

Good job, I look forward to reading more!

This seems quite interesting- like I want to know whats happening.
I like how you described the girl, it was just enough description to not go overboard.

But I think it might be a bit better if you spaced the paragraphs differently.

Other than that, I think you have done a really good job so far. :D