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  • Rachel-Marie

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    Chapter two was much better than the first as far as spacing and such. The story is well written! Keep up the good work! (:
    June 6th, 2011 at 04:54pm
  • roux.

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    Hey, I've read this before. Only, you had a layout with a colored background and everything. Anywhooz... I liked your second chapter much, much, much better than your first chapter. It was... more structured? It had better grammar too, and a little bit better phrased sentences. :)
    June 6th, 2011 at 08:51am
  • Wanting_More

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    I like it! Just be careful about spacing and spelling. And the speed of things! Other then that, it's great!!!!! (:
    June 3rd, 2011 at 01:40am
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