April 25th, 2012 at 05:44am
I do need to explain the first chapter, sorry.
Basically, the first chapter - at the library - is set a few years in the future with that one flashback moment of Boxing Day.
Then the rest follow on and are set in the time of that flashback. Or y'know, the weeks following.
In my next edit, I'm adding in some ages and dates etc. to make it, y'know, more evident.
I really like this story. I was confused on the jump from chapter one to chapter two...Though, I was extremely surprised that it was Howie's dad that (possibly) raped Rhi? o_o Did not see that coming. I don't know how Howie could ever forgive his father. That's just...awful. -.-
But your writing is lovely, easily descriptive, and flowing. Its easy to read, but it gives me a good picture in my head. It did jump around a little, but other than that, great story! :)
Best of luck to you!