This seems really awesome. I love how the main character (I don't think you mentioned his name yet; if you did, I didn't catch it.) knew exactly how John Lennon died. It made him seem nerdy in a cute way.
"Dark room, dark covers, dark, dark,dark. No, not dark, but not light, either." I didn't really understand this sentence and it confused me for the whole chapter.
It seems really normal and cute so far. I'm curious where you're going with the Kyden (is that right?) character. I'll subscribe =)
you're very great at writing dialog, which I find very difficult :/ the picture gave it a kind of "Outsiders" feel, but that's okay :) I'm looking foward to seeing where this goes, update soon
I would like more dialog before all of the description, and maybe some more description of how they look and personal habits and traits. Keep it up, I'mm looking forward to seeing more!
To be honest, the layout isn't the nicest. The font is extremely large, that bothered me enough to push default layout. A lot of people will just exit if they see a layout they don't like.
"Dark room, dark covers, dark, dark,dark. No, not dark, but not light, either." Between the comma and the italicized dark, you need a space. I also think you should work on the sentence after that, it ruins the flow of the story. It's awkward.
In dialogue, you can't leave it without any punctuation. In the beginning, a character says no. You have it this way: "No" When it should be: "No." or "No," if you continue with that speaker's sentence.
You have more technical errors throughout the story (grammar, spelling), I suggest getting a beta. :) They're great for catching mistakes that us writers miss.
The dialogue is great though, I get the relationship really well already in one chapter. They seem like real brothers. The last two lines really brought their relationship home, it was almost comedic and I enjoyed that. From this, I can't really tell what this is about, but it's caught my interest.