All Hands on Deck - Comments

This is absolutely lovely. For 100 words, it is quite descriptive and full of emotion. Probably better than any drabble I could do.

I wish I could say more, but anything else I have has already been said by the other commentors, and I don't want to steal someone else's words. I adore this, though, and thought I should tell you.

Amazing. You have taken my breath away. I was not expecting the end, and a gasp escaped my lips when I read it. This is truly poetic, and it really makes such an impression with so little words. I love the language that you used. Really great piece!

Wow. This is even better than the last one. Well, maybe not better, about the same, but I prefer this one. It tells SUCH a long story in only 100 words, and that is something I could never do...

This was really good for a first drabble, you managed to fit a whole story in such few words. I'm going to tell you what I think happened, feel free to correct me. I think that whoever made those ships is sad, I'm guessing they're lonely because their father either died or literally sailed away. Anyway, I really liked this, it was very good (:

50-100 word drabble contest

Oh my gosh!

I really like this one. It was very original and simply descriptive. The whole thing was simple in its essence but it held so much more. I adore the repetition of "this is the last ship I had" and how you said all his ships had sailed away and how his father had sailed away, as well. It was clever and lovely. I also adored how the pride had been deflated by years of dust and (I'm guessing) loneliness. And the last sentence pretty much, just about, broke my heart.

Again, I admire this one. It's so beautiful. I think you have a good shot! <3

oh my gosh.
that last sentence totally sold me.
i didn't expect it to fall, i found this very enjoyable.
:)