Holly - Comments

Its short but very good. The layouts simple but nice. I love the description you put into it and I'm wondering what happens next. Keep up the great work. :)

I hope I'm right, but I'm getting a vibe that this is going to be one of those stories where the girl gets so screwed by religion, it isn't funny. I love stories like that. I won't say that it was confusing, because it truly wasn't. It was, in fact, quite descriptive. It seems as if this is one of those stories that's going to turn out truly in touch with reality. If its' going to continue with that overall theme - and include all the nitty gritty about life and what not, then consider me a sold subscribee :)

Another great story idea from a great writer. Kudos for that dude!

The descriptions within the first chapter were fantastic. I loved the way the girl was described; with her body, where she was and what she was doing. Not many stories I see focus on religion, so this is a change. By reading the summery and the first chapter, I have a feeling that the story is going to turn out well. Good job.

I like this a lot. You have a lovely way with words and your descriptions are marvelous. I like how you played with the religious theme. It makes sense, truly. I hope you'll continue this soon.