Carnivore - Comments

wow! I really liked this story :O it's creepy and gorey but the good kind :D

The descriptions are awesome, the girl's character is awesome because she has no remorse for waht she does and has no pity in anyone.

I also like how you went straight to the action. :) and it was easy to read, also, your layout is cool :D

I am definetly subscribing to this :D

that was brilliant darl', i liked it i laughed at the bit where she was like "come out come out wherever you are" the only thing i'd suggest is to do with the layout, prehaps change the font for the title so its more readable and stands out more? just a suggestion.

Horrors are not really my cup of tea - but this is an execption. I love the way the story and plot is put together. Even though I've only read the first chapter but it's really dark and you could just kinda set yourself in it a bit. Also the layout just adds on to the atmospere and the plot more.

Wow....that was wow
First off the banner is good I like it, not always does the layout how to fit perfect with the story; I dont see why people think it always does -_-. But I really like it :)

The summary was really good, it had me wanting to read more, it was short but didn't give too much away.
It's dark,twisted which I love very much, I love that's how your making this story.
Overall I can see myself getting hook on this story :) I will be reading more.

Oh man. Dude, this is twisted as!

Ohkay, here I go.

Banner:
I don't really get the point of a bloodied book seeing that she's a supernatural being, but whatevs.

Layout
Nice color meshing with the banner, honestly. The blood and the red set up a...well...a bloody theme for the whole story. :)

Content
You have quite a few typos. There's a thread in the forums section where you can request for someone different and completely 'fresh' or neutral to beta your story for you although you could just read through a few times and pick out the mistakes yourself.

It's cool how you're making it so dark and bloody. I like that. The twisted sadism, and thwarted love? Bleh. Gives a brand new meaning to 'Hell hath no fury to a woman scorned,' now don't it? Now, this isn't something that I'll probably seek out myself for a read unless recc'ed but still... it's not so bad. :)

Oh, and of course, you leave us wondering as to what the heck she really is. I hope she's a demon - because that would be so cool and such. Anywhooz, great work on this, love!

I really like how sick and twisted your writing is. You portray the women killer very well. However, I'm no sure what she is if she isn't a vampire or a werewolf, I'm not sure what she is. I like it though. You are a very talented writer and should continue! :)

ME LIKES! Gore, gore, yes gore. Its really cool causs it seems as of its set in the 18 centuary.

what a terrible way to day. HAH he deserved it. i like it!

Hungary is a place in Europe. Hungry is a feeling one gets when one has not eaten for a long time. Fix that because it will lose you a lot of readers if you don't,

The story moved along very quickly, which is definitely a good thing...it was very intriguing. Great job so far...keep it up. :D

Ryan

I was expecting a male monster but you did something waaaay more awesome please continue ^_^

Love. It.

Ohhhhh :) I like this one. You have certainly given it a creepy vibe, and I'm liking that vibe :) Your descriptions are absolutely amazing!!!! For just one chapter I really do think you have something here and would love to read more! I loved the layout as well. Keep up the amazing work.

I really liked the first chapter! It sounds like it will be an interesting story! I'm going to subscribe (: