Disprayed What You're Always Preaching - Comments, page 2

bob morley (100)

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It's a really interesting idea, and I can't wait to see it take off. :)

The way you introduced it in the prologue was pretty cool. It does need a little more background, but other than that I totally got what you were saying. And I like how you made up your own words to fit the story, I think that's really creative. Overall, it's really good and I can't wait to see how it progresses. :)

June 9th, 2011 at 08:26pm

angy_something (100)

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I already love this.
Love ya

June 6th, 2011 at 01:15am

blood_sucker (100)

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I love this so much:D
I'm so excited about this, honey.
Love you~XO

June 5th, 2011 at 09:39pm

Naberrie (100)

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This story is so original.
I'm in love with it!
Can't wait for another chapter :))

June 5th, 2011 at 08:20pm

Doctor Bones (100)

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I like thissssssss! :D
xox

June 5th, 2011 at 07:59pm

teen spirit. (100)

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First off, I'm not a big fan of the picture of Gerard of the side, but whatever. You can still read easily enough so it's all good.

Your writing is very nice, it flows very well. I didn't see many grammar mistakes, so that's good. Your vocabulary was great, also.

There was a moment where you wrote in italics but I think it wasn't in the past anymore so maybe you should change that? I'm not sure if it was supposed to be like that or not.

It would definitely suck to be the Death God. Ugh. It's very original though, and I'm glad that there's a a kind of supernatural story about Gerard where he isn't a vampire.

I really like this, keep it up. <3 (:

June 4th, 2011 at 09:45pm