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  • cyanidedoll_12

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    yeah its a work in progress and Im working on the detail things.I can never decide what to describe and not.thanks for the advice.
    June 5th, 2011 at 05:27pm
  • ninjapoptart

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    Cute imagery with the baby but it kind of drags on and is hard to keep intereested in. Instead of describing every little things, start getting into the plot or surroundings.
    June 5th, 2011 at 09:46am
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