As promise, a comment. Well done Jen! Amazing, even if it's kinda dark. I don't see why you need me to comment on your story, since you seem okay without it, but anywho. Good job? :P.
O.O Fucking amazing, but y'know, I'm shit scared of Gerard Way now. I love Sweeney Todd, so I can like hear the gurgling noises of throat slitting from that movie. It's creepy, I know.
Anyway, this was actually kind of beautiful, it was really simply written but it made a much bigger impact. Great work.
Whoa, that was just. Wow! I can kind of picture this picture but damn, as sad as it is I want to actually see how this looks. It sound beatuiful but obviously dark and scary... This was pretty awesome (even though Mikey and Frank had to die ;''[) Anyways for this being a first for you, it was well written:)