Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! If you have any other critiques or comments or anything, feel free to post away!
August 16th, 2011 at 07:41pm
Hello! First of all, I like where you're going with your story. It has that science fiction edge to a mythological place and not everyone can pull it off. You, however, pulled it off quite well. Just one piece of advice, be sure to space your paragraphs out. Like this.
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So that the readers can see the story more easily. :) It makes the story a bit more organized and easir to read.